I love it! Sending giant virtual hugs bc your book is awesome!

Hhhhmmm... INteresting...

I loved it. OTP for eternity

Please make more!

Wow. That was intense. I did have a couple flash-backs to Alice in Wonderland when Jack says "we're all insane [here]" but that just made it even better. Almost haunting. Lovely. I think it does well as a stand-alone but I would like to see some more. Keep it up :)

awesome

hee. wonderful :D :D loved it! damn there shud be more.

oh you made me turn insane X_X!

your story was...interesting. go jack/ralph fanfics! i thought everything was pretty kool, must see wat else you've written

Jack's desire for dominance in all respects seems to be mixed with his liking for Ralph. Makes for an interesting story here. I like this (even if it does make me shiver a bit at the elements of sadism in Jack's statements and actions).

I love the whole twistedness of it. Of course I'm crazy and think bad guys should win occassionally. But the whole Jack just wanting Ralph probably for his body is fun. As well as everyone being insane. Its all around Incredible.

Loved it!

A whee bit disturbing, I know most people write Jack and Ralph slashs and I think they must all be bonkers. I know it's only fan fiction so they turn the characters characteristics a bit, but Jack is evil and even though this story was well written it would never be possible.

Write something not slashy with your talents!

Nice fic. I quite like your characterisation. I always thought the lot of them would go bloody stark raving bonkers after a while. I didn't like the ending of the book. It would have been much more interesting if they had stayed on the island. And I so reckon the whole thing was practically oozing slash! Well... pre-slash anyways, considering their age. Well done!

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DreamWeaver

I loved this; it was well written, well described, and I could feel the characters come through strongly. I only wish, as with your other (well written :)) Lord of the flies Fanfic that there was more of it!