I bet you'll make it where Pandora teaches Danny to resist mind control attacks/items.

you forgot the c in gathica

I knew Desiree would be the ghost you chose to help Danny .

The pace Danny is gaining power makes sense. Like you said Pandora is teaching him, and his personal life isn't in the way. Its like the Amity Park game where Danny had Desiree teach him how to use his ghost power .

You used "halfa" by mistake. Just something that stood out to me.

Pls update this is so awesome XD

You accidently called Danny halfa even though he is full ghost

Huh...its like you want Danny to have a harem or just be with pandora which is cool but what's with Sam saying her and Danny are in a relationship?

-cringes- You were really laying it on thick in this chapter. So much dramatized writing that you couldn't get immersed in the story at all. Or connect with the characters' feelings at all. Like seriously, I felt like I was watching one of those melodramatic soap operas that are playing on the television sometimes. Also, I have to agree with one of the other recent reviewers; you REALLY need to use a thesaurus to find better descriptive words. Waterworks is a terrible way to describe someone who's in legitimate emotional pain. I'm fact, "turning on the waterworks" is pretty much a phrase that means somebody is fake crying. Not to mention it sounds so fake when a teenage kid is going "waaaahhhh" like a baby. Really. Only BABIES really make those noises when they cry.

Now, I'm sorry this is pretty much a flame review, but you really need to change some things to make your story really enjoyable to read. Because I honestly tried to enjoy reading this, but at the first "waah", all immersion was lost and I honestly couldn't take this seriously. I hope that one day I'll be able to read this and be able to connect to the characters' emotions and enjoy reading your story. But today is definitely not that day. Farewell.

Great updating here ,and nice job with all the characters.

keep the good writing.

Freakshow is even creepier here than in the show, wow.

Invader Johnny Signing Off.

Ypu came back with an amazing chapter:) have a happy thanksgiving

i can't read any more of this. i feel like your mocking the characters and their emotions with your writing. it's so staged and the characters are incredibaly ooc; seriously who the hell uses waterworks to discribe crying with some weird weh sound. it's practically a script rather than a story. the thing is, it wouldn't even be that bad if you put actual thought in the characters actions and properly discribed emotions with better and more emotional word choices. also, stop being so afraid to use commas. the absence of them is very distracting.

Not bad. A lot of minor grammatical errors but if you get a beta reader it'll be fine. Overall, nice story

" Aw Cheese Logs" I'm dying it's so funny