Good story idea but lame second chapter...

Always good to see some insight into characters. I did notice a severe dip in quality and quantity in this chapter, but honestly I'm just glad there's been an update at all. I should know haha.

This story is new for you so I won't judge you too harshly, but do be sure to add more plot in future chapters. I'm going to assume that IRL you're busy and all that. If you have to, I wouldn't mind waiting even longer for the next chapter if it means more substance into this story, which has a lot of potential. While I'm a sucker for good narration, in this chapter it was more or less drabble. Narration usually focuses more on the character's insight, how they feel, what they're thinking, why, and so on, rather than what they're physically doing. You don't have to describe Kohta cleaning for 3 minutes lol. Still, you do a good job in describing setting and environment so keep that up.

Now I can't say for sure if there's a legit rule for this, but do be careful about your Response Corner, as more veteran readers on this site will just see this as an excuse for the author to add a higher word count than the actual chapter suggests. I say that if you honestly do want a Response Corner, do so as a separate story.

Not a bad chapter at all my friend! I liked how you should Kouta lifestyle and made him more human. Nice job my friend!

Can't wait to see how says will behave towards khouta and how odd khouta will act towards his new job can't wait the next chapter

This has the potential to be an excellent story. I hope you update soon.

Nice start Will! I can't wait to see where this goes!

This is pretty well done. The grammar does tend to be a bit choppy at times when you shoot for more complex phrases, though that could just be me.

In my opinion, even though I understand that Saya just got saved from a near raping/abduction, I feel like you sort of made Souichiro rather OOC. In the manga and the anime, Team Takashi escorted Saya safely to her home, but Souichiro still was someone of integrity and nationalism, so he still was someone who demanded respect from others regardless of who they may be. You're going at a right direction in terms of the tight leash Saya's parents hold on her, but in regards to Souichiro's dialogue with Kouta, it seems like you're going too easy on him, like he already expects a future son-in-law. That's going too fast. Kouta should be feeling like pissing his pants in his presence at all times, no matter how much he helped/will help the Takagi family. The respect and gratefulness is there in Saya's dad, but so should the overexcessive pride of an overstereotypical Asian father and ultra-nationalist.

Moments like "even though the distance of the table was of a good length, I had Kouta feel that he was being looked at in the eyes" just kinda threw the flow of the story rather badly. If this story is gonna be in 3rd person from Kouta's view, stick to it. Only include other character's thoughts if it's through dialogue with Kouta or from his observations.

I'm not sure what to make of this story as you only have one chapter, but i'll be sure to keep an eye out for this. Regardless the writing is still a lot more mature and professional than most of the fics for this fandom, so take pride in that lol. Sub!