raven smirking at her boyfriend beastboy yes you are mine

I loved this

raven saying to garfield we are staying inside

Way to go Beast Boy. Taking charge and making sure Raven would stop thinking so poorly of herself. On Raven's part, it must have been to to finally release some of those pent up emotions that she has been hiding for so long.

I like the way Raven was refusing to admit the obvious to herself. And BB certainly was bold.

Awwwwww amazing story! I am so fangirling right now! awwww! I have no words this story just make my day! liked that you used Raven pov and I loved the way their first and second kiss was! Ssj Maggie

Awwwwww amazing story! I am so fangirling right now! awwww! I have no words this story just make my day! liked that you used Raven pov and I loved the way their first and second kiss was! Ssj Maggie

I was either fangirling, squealing, or saying 'Awww' the whole story, LOVED IT!

waaa that was sooooooo ADORBSSSSS!

Aww

This is a good story. The plot is basically non-existent, but what that does is make the story feel more natural. There are two kinds of stories: plot-driven and character-driven. The best ones are usually character-driven, and you done that well here. Your characterisations were spot-on, too, and there were plenty of moments that had me grinning like an idiot (BBRae OTP), just because the things they were saying were /so them/.

What this story lacked, I feel, is appropriate grammar. When I decide on whether or not to favourite a story, I always look for it to meet a certain minimum requirement in two of the three areas: characters, plot and grammar/structure/spelling. You might have even had me, if it weren't for my following nitpicks:

Some of your sentences carry on a bit. It's important that, when you write a story, you go over it out loud as well as on the page. Whenever you need to catch your breath in the middle of a sentence, there should be a comma. Whenever someone's name is used in a sentence by another person, there is usually a comma right after it (or before, if it's at the end of the sentence). When it flows better out loud, it flows better in your head.

Some of your sentences were too short. Specifically, I'm referring to a bit of dialogue at the start of the story. You tend to use periods and exclamation points where a comma might be more appropriate. Again, try saying it out loud. If there's only a short pause between one part of a line and the next, it should probably have a comma instead of a period.

Apart from those few things, there's not really much more I can say without writing you a full-blown professional review P

I enjoyed myself while I was reading this, I love BBRae (still not sure /why/ I love it so much, but I do), and the story fits well with the other one-shots on . Thanks for the good read.

Raven was adorable in this.I also understand where Raven is coming from about her book. If I only had a few paragraphs left friends and family will have to wait unless it's an emergency. Though I would tell them I'm almost finished and to come back later. Anyway, I love this.

I like how you did Raven's narrative. Cute and sweet! Also, I like how BB said, "And Raven? - I like you too.. A lot." :D