THIS IS SO GOOD!

At first I was very intrigued by the idea of Tris being Erudite but Four remaining Dauntless. Tris being Divergent and right under Jeanine, falling in love across factions... Oh the possibilities. Alas, you didn't run with this possibility. Actually, you didn't take the story anywhere. There's nothing special about Tris being Erudite, at least according to you. I would even go as far as Tris was dumber than ever in this story. Another issue i had with the story was not enough Four of course. But not just that. You were writing this story as your own version of Divergent right? So why not show us your version of Dauntless through Four's eyes? Double POVs would have been perfect for this story. I mean, why was Four almost certain that he was being watched?

Oh well, i hope the sequel has some answers band packs a mean punch. If not, oh well, I still like the idea of Tris being Erudite and falling in love across the faction divide.

I keep expecting Tris to come up with some ingenious and crazy idea. So disappointed in her. For an erudite divergent she's been awfully quiet and useless. And Four... There simply wasn't enough Four in this story.

Oh no. Definitely not the bang I was hoping for.

Aw, she got to experience ziplining with Four on the other side. So sweet, so romantic.

Would so LOVE to know what Four was thinking and saying to Zeke there...

Aw, sweet. She still gets to become Dauntless. Yay. I was so worried about how they would get to know one another well with them living in separate factions. It doesn't matter which path you choose, your destiny will always find you. So excited for the upcoming chapters.

At first, I was a little skeptical of the idea of Beatrice as an Eurudite, but as I continued reading, I realized I really liked this story more and more. I absolutely loved how Tris and Four met; I thought it was really true to character. I also liked the double dates and the Dauntless feast was cool. I was really saddened though-of course- when Zeke died, but I like how you wrote the little funeral scene with the song (this sounds weird, but it reminded me of Zuko's uncle from a cartoon I watched when I was little, avatar the last Airbender). Anyway, I really liked reading your story and can't wait to see what will happen in your next one! Thank you for this amazing story!

eeek! the feels!

This scene brought tears to my eyes and was very powerful.

I'm absolutely in love with this series. It is something completely different. It gives me goosebumps and I adore the dynamic of Tris and Tobias. I read this in one night, I have to get up early, and now it's almost 3 in the morning! ! No regrets . Please continue. You are very gifted at writing

Such an original story and a very enjoyable read!

Poor dear Zeke. :(

Oh no, this is just awful! I hate that he is being tortured and that he thinks she doesn't love him . I don't know what boy make of Caleb or Marcus. They are both behaving oddly.

I really don't trust Jeanine although you don't write her as evil as the books. I am not sure what she is up to, but it is not good. I don't know why Tris seemingly trusts her.