I have been waiting 4 long years for sun and nagasumi's response... i need closure

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great to see this up and running again, but why can't maki and mr. seto just accept that sun wants to follow her own path?

Hey ms/mr Author I know you haven't updated the story in a year and sound great but if you like updating that be great

Hello!
I like this fanfic! Its pretty rushed and could use some better pacing, but its got great potential. Keep writing!
Also, let me just say that everything felt kind of off. It felt, to me, like everyone was just saying the lines you wanted them too. You did use phrases that are common in the anime and in proper context, and that's great, but you shouldn't hang on just words. You should spend more time on describing the situation, the emotions, the scenery and thoughts. Right now it feels...plastic. You should expand on everything to make it feel more real and more like the anime/manga, whichever is your source.
That's not to say that you aren't doing good. I like your overall story and where you want it to go. Just don't be in such a rush. Spend time making it more realistic. I promise you, this is the easy part and your readers will thank you for it.
I'm sorry if I'm harping on you. I'm really interested in helping. Like I said, I like the plot and I just want to help you get better. Isn't that what this site is for? Oh, and please don't feel like you HAVE to do as I'm suggesting, because that's all this is: A suggestion. Expand or not, that's up to you. I'm just saying what I think readers want to see that you're not providing.

great job