Is this named after The Red Chord's song?

Excellent ideas here! Would love to hear more of Heather's changed to Silent Hill.

Oh I do like this alternative. It does have this tragic vibe that goes along far better with the game that the actual canon ending, though it raises several interesting questions about Heather's future.

I think I would have enjoyed this a little more if it were looked over more than once. It seems like this might have been the first draft and it's kind of jarring that it starts in the middle of the scene. The use of flowery language doesn't help much either.

As for the idea that you came up with, it's really interesting and the ending was really neat. I'd love to get to know more about the idea in a better elaborated and polished final draft.

I know it can be frustrating to hear criticisms like this, but just I'm only taking the time to write this because I know you have the potential to do better. I look forward to reading more of your stuff as you progress.

PS. Try not to give away the ENTIRE story in your synopsis. That's something that can turn readers off instantly, especially if they read your story expecting the synopsis to only be the gist of the story. Maybe try something like "After her confrontation with Claudia, Heather discovers something blah blah" something like that.

i never played SH3 but this was good! have you played 4? thats my fav right there. continue the good work!