i like your story! such a pity that it's only one shot.

Hey this was interesting, It felt like you've been role playing and came up with this. Either way I bet your a really good role player. If your interested why not join one? I would love to play with someone who's able to go into such detail, Plus you could use this girl Misaki and expand on her. Give her even more life. Anyway sorry for rambling.
Here if you choose to join a role play forum use this one it's a newer one but I like it the most out of all the ones I play so far.

forum/Kyoto-Ghoul/185855/

If you join please make Misaki as one of your characters she would fit right in XD