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emi chapter 1 . 3/16/2016 Aw, the joy of beating a parent is an unparalleled bliss indeed! The glee I feel whenever I beat one of my parents is just unexplainable... Especially when I beat my father since he tends and enjoys to tease me (all his three children to be honest) in a manner that reminds me of your Thranduil (don't worry, we love teasing him back). I can empathize with Nimdir (by the way, has the name have a meaning?). That being said, I thoroughly enjoyed this piece. I would also like to point something feathered moon wings said in her review that I agree upon: their prides. So different but very present. Thank you for the story! |
Brightpath2 chapter 1 . 5/6/2015 Aw they're all so cute. :) And of course they rarely admit out loud to their children how proud they are of them. |
feathered moon wings chapter 1 . 5/3/2015 But there wont be peace forever... ANYwho, I really liked the differences between the prides; Oropher's very stern, Thranduil's quite secret but very much there and Legolas' very childish haha. As always, very lovely your writing stile. Good night sweetheart :) |
The Enchanted Stream chapter 1 . 5/2/2015 Well, I landed on this story because I really like Thranduil-centric stories. I only used to read Harry Potter fanfics, but I've decided that I need to branch out into another fandom, so I started a new LOTR account so I could make a Best of Thranduil C2. He just does not get enough credit, you know? I'm always surprised that there are not more really good Thranduil stories out there. Why is that? And if you know any really good Thranduil stories, please help me find them! Anyhoo. One piece of constructive criticism: Dialogue Tags. You need to develop your dialogue. For example, you use "Legolas insisted" too much. It gets a little repetitive. To quote Bob Mayer, "Trying to make up for the lack in written dialogue by overusing eccentric dialogue tags is very common and very jarring." Vowed, shouted, groaned, advised, muttered, insisted. Use these dialogue tags sparingly, because they clutter up the flow of your dialogue. |
I luv Milarion 1201 chapter 1 . 5/2/2015 Wow! I really love your one-shots through generations of house of Oropher. :D I really love conversations between Thranduil, Oropher and Legolas. |
SmileyXs Ice-cream Sprinkles chapter 1 . 5/2/2015 Awwwww so cute Mellon-nin the falcon :D Love it so fluffy :D and awesome :D Squeals :D Lol Their all so cute :D lol :D Nimdir always makes me laugh Thank you so much :D For this story :D Off course Mellon-nin :D I'll leave you a review :D Hi again hehe you keep surprising me Mellon-nin :D Yay 42(I think) hehe I am starting to get number dizzy :D lol Have a great day with Ice cream and sprinkles :D See ya |