For chapter 8 post cold war would be a better reference I'd think since it ended in 1991

Anyone else reading through fanfics because of the lockdown

I'll make this constructive criticism for the author and any readers who like really good fanfics.

It's OK. It's probably the only fanfiction I've read that Percy is the creator that's been updated alot which makes it unique in a way however its very cliche as well.

Percy despite being an all powerful being the creator of the universe and a primordial of almost everything is still the 'really good guy Percy' not letting anyone calm him lord or anything like that. I get it that in the books percy hates that but this is different, percy in the books was from a poor family and thought he was below people so he never liked being praised after that. This percy was born a primordial and was raised to be the creator eventually he would be atleast a little different than the books and really it makes it a little annoying to read at times.

The spelling and grammar needs work. Maybe it gets better later chapters but up until about chapter 15 the grammar is very bad. Spelling isn't the worst an odd mistake here and there but the grammar can be hard to understand sometimes.

The cliche were percy saves everyone and they all get them codenames in the army is used in this story. It's a little annoying to read really considering there wasn't much of a need for it. Like what was the point he literally is ruler of the universe there is no way them demigods are good enough to be his commanders and the only reason that is in the story is because your trying to please everyone.

Basically to sum it up its a good story if you don't mind them clichés. If you can look over the grammar and the overused plot points it's actually very good. It's somewhat creative in the things the writer uses the chapter lengths are very good and it's obvious you put effort into it.

Of the author of this book does read it. I'm not saying any of these things to offend you or hurt you I'm just trying to be constructive here so you can improve your writing. It's nothing against you because I know I don't have the time or patience to write a book this long.

I won’t even lie I cried a lot in the last chapters you wrote this really good usual I’m not one for crying but this actually brought tears to my eyes

your disclaimer has competition, aka your crush arty, has competition

Nice work good filler chapter

God's they do have carrots shaved up there Arses

Nice sex scene

bad story don't read it. why cause its so boring

"can and pizza box" ? Right... Of course...

Why would immortal beings just fade for no reason ? Aren't they supposed to be... immortal ?

Kind of a boring End. So Percy is dead. Worst descion of a Author to kill the MC.

How old are you becuz this story just came up from a dark ally and shaned grammor "HELP MEEEEE!

Thank the gods I've been waiting for a good hera fanfiction forever. (One that isn't 1-5 pages long. Or incredibly short like 100-150 words each page. And one with detail))

*sarcastic as hell* yeah we expected bambi

Percy jacksons song for when chaos fades is 'dad's song' by set it off. And now I'm fucking crying over hem