Write more soon please.

your sick

This story is a badly written shit, bad spelling.
and again we repeat the appeal of Daenerys being raped by that foul creep of Drogo. Is not this a Jon / Dany story? worse you repeat that Daenerys loved Drogo, but she still loves Jon. I mean who she loves? decide at once.

I like your fanfic

If it weren't for the bad grammar this might have been a good story

The same three paragraphs repeated so often, re-edit this chapter it is unreadable in its current form

will he have ice powers?

Love the story! Please update soon :)

Great chapter!
You still need to work on the grammar and typos though :)

Great plotline. Loving it so far, but a word of advice, please check your spelling and grammar. Run on sentences interrupt the flow of the story

I really like what your doing with this story. But if your stuck i can give you ideas.
In the show "GAME OF THRONES" your at the end of Season 2.

Here is my suggestion, have John start having dreams and visions about the white walkers, Westeros destroyed, Everyone John Cares about are dead. That disturbs him so much that he leaves Daenerys after freeing the slaves in Astapor. Daenerys gives him one of his dragons for protection. This is more of an investigation on what John will find beyond the wall.

This is just an option for your story nothing more

Good idea but bad writing style. Story is too dry. Show don't tell. This story read like summary followed by summary by more summaries, half of these are canon rehash.

I can't wait for more SOON PLEASE update as soon as possible please :)

This is good, can't wait to see Jon Targaryan temper when he finds out that is brothers are dead ( Robb, Bran Rickon)

great chapter looking forward to more