hey i liked this story you did a good job and also keep up the good work i'm rooting for you

I looked at this out of curiosity when you mentioned it in Saviors of the Future. It's beautiful. :D

That cut deep you know. Now I'm afraid to play Minecraft. Anyway you can talk to me on pm if u want.

I like this story. It reminds me of the whole concept of "Man versus Nature" and that people are actually the 'evil ones'. It's also a nice change to find that Herobrine (or you) is actually the good guy, meant to protect the mobs of Minecraft.

To answer your author's note: First off, I could understand what you were getting at in this story and for the most part it is nicely written. However, I feel that the best way to improve your writing is to re-read it before publishing it on fanfiction for grammatical errors and for clarity (I have this problem with my own writing so I'm speaking from experience). I think that better clarity and grammar and sentence structure in general makes for a better story since it is easier to read and understand.

Aside from the grammar thing there's not much wrong with this story (like plot and stuff like that) because it is one chapter long.

Good luck to you, and keep writing! (The more you write the better writer you become)

-Zelda48

Interesting take, especially loved the last sentence. ARE we the monsters? 0.0 Keep on being awesome!

Awesome! I love how you twist the perspective and bring the reader into the story.

Wow I like this one-shot! You should keep writing in this style because it turns out great in the end! And also one of the reasons I like this I guess is because I'm kind of two sided, such as how sometimes I like Herobrine and other times I want to kill him. XP But anyways, you explained well in depth anout everything and came out with a small plot twist and it was a nice read all together. :) Keep writing good things like this!

Well written. Alot of creativity.

This was an amazing take on Herobrine. You did a great job. This was very good for a debut fanfic. I could continue shower you in compliments, but you get the idea. Brava brava. I encourage you to post more of your writing.

I think this story was a great debut. You creativly used facts from minecraft to make a good story out of it. Bravo!

This is beautiful.
It makes it seem that Herobrine is not a cold-blooded killer; he's a protector. They say Notch is. This makes it so that he isn't. You've written this in such a way that he doesn't sound heartless, which is one thing a majority of the MC fandom miss a lot. To me I pick up a tone where he feels like he's missing something but he isn't searching for it nor trying to fill it.
He's accepted the situation, yet taking action.

Wow! This is really good!
I really like the twist ending, too - it's a neat touch.
Hopefully we'll be seeing more of you in the future!