Nice chapter

good story so far, would love to read more. I hope you update soon.

can U finish (The Promise) I WOULD LIKE TO KNOW THE END! PLEASE AND THANK YOU!

...ok so asuna is a bitch here and you should probably change the operation cost to around 1 mil yen

Love it hope there's a new chapter too!

New chapter?

Bruh you need more chapters to see what happens next cause I'm so stoked to Find out PLS PLS MAKE MORE!

Ok asuna kidnapping is just too much ok so please don't make Kirito and asuna hate each other can you make them understand and just be friends cause those two where so great

A few things from this chapter I noticed were the description, I'd just lop off the "I'm terrible at writing summarys" part, myself, because actually, what came before it was a perfectly valid, minimalist summary, and just tells people you're not confident in yourself, so why should they be? Also, summaries is the plural, as a side note.

Similarly, I think you actually have an amazing first sentence. You could probably cut out the part that says "speaking " and "thoughts", because while I know you were trying to help the reader, your first sentence shows really well that you're using italics for thoughts, and it'll read better as a whole.

I guess, just remember, that being able to say something without actually saying it is really important in writing. It's called a "show; don't tell", and it's a really important concept that can make or break a piece of writing. So, for example, someone might write in a story "Character A really cares about Character B, ever since they first met!" but this doesn't really invest us in the characters at all. A better way to do it, would have been to show Character A, with a soft smile, putting a blanket on Character B, because Character B fell asleep on the couch and it was a cold winter night, or something like that.

Also, while the dialogue is pretty solid, it reads a little unnaturally, because you aren't using contractions at times, and you're forgetting commas. For example,

"That's the fifth one she has taken out today"
To
"That's the fifth one she's taken out today"

"Hey do you think the black swordsman will show up today"
To
"Hey, you think the black swordman's gonna show up today?"

But otherwise it's quite serviceable, and I could see why a character would say most of what's being said.

Ignoring the mechanical errors, it seems like you've got a good idea of what you want to write, which is really important, and you're definitely better than I was when I still tried to write stories. Beyond that, there's only things like themes to worry about, and if you really want to improve your writing, I'd recommend searching up Digibro, and Mother's Basement on youtube. They do some really great analysis on the meanings behind things, and can really help you understand how to pull at the hearstrings of an audience.

Anyway, keep up the good work, and I hope you keep enjoying writing!

Awesome chapter!

Please, update soon!

I like it!

Nice chapter. I thought Yuki died.

Oh no! Kirito!

Oh no!

Poor Yuuki!

I hope that Kirito will be able to save her!