I can't understand wtf anyone is saying, just like in the redwall books.

Spot-on accents and great incorporation of each one into their respective story. You had me reading this in a bunch of different voices! Very cool to hear a Highland accent on a vermin for the first time.

Oh boy, can't wait to read what's next. Reading is the easy part, waiting is the hard part. So you will do hares next? Oh boy, that sounds great! I wish you the best of luck! Sorry about the late review, computer and phone won't let me send!

Great job on accents again. Love how you can change between the two! Very hard to do (at least for me) Good composure too, no 'rushing' at any point. I can't offer much in the way of reviews however, my English is a advanced of a five year old. Frequent use of translators and dictionairies are required to understand texts. Also I can't use my account in the PRC so a guest account is all I can manage. Wish the best of luck to you and hope to see the next chapter come! "We should be taught not to wait for inspiration to start a thing. Action always generates inspiration. Inspiration seldom generates action."
Frank Tibolt

As always, good on everything. Probably should write more, I'd say around 20% more. Computer has trouble eh? Bad luck! They always seem to be life's solution then they break down! Good luck and if you can repair soon then use the good old pen and paper! "I believe that if life gives you lemons, you should make lemonade... And try to find somebody whose life has given them vodka, and have a party."
Ron White

I just realized I'm not following this fine piece. My mistake.

I noticed a few words in the otter and Dibbun dialects last chapter that seemed a bit out of place. Zillan said "disrupte'", which reads in my mind as "disruptay", and Tiggan used "stoopa" as a stand-in for "stupid" where "stoopid" or "stoopit" may have been more in-line with a toddler's pronunciation. Just my two cents; don't mind if it doesn't seem right to you.

Great job! Sorry i couldn't review sooner, my ISP is upgrading. As always good content, composure and consistency. For the future, write more, just a couple hundred more words! Best wishes to you! "Writing is a art, giving opinions is a job" unknown

Good job with accents so far! You pretty much nailed it! In my opinion, Id tone down the accents just a little to help some people understand it. I strongly reccomended that you watch the redwall tv series on YouTube, it would be perfect! What's next, shrews? "A man is only as good as his creations, his creations are only as good as he is"

"'No, I think I'm okay…,' he glanced up at the other beast."
Unless Alaerr 'glanced' those words at Barrul, this is a punctuation error.

Other than my grammatical nitpicking, this is an awesome story. Would you mind if I used it for reference the next time I need a highlander accent?

Wow, great start! Really great job with the accents and plot. Still ain't enough yet to actually see what your writing style will be. I'd say you should write one or more chapters, just to show potential writing styles.