this story had so many things wrong I can't even... ( How did I say this without sounding rude?) Boo please don't take this in the wrong way... You are a great author and a wonderful person I generally enjoy your stories But pitto seemed so... Manipulative and abusive here you wrote it as if pit was the one at fault for not having enough time because of being at a War a freaking war! and to add sand to the wound the reason for being late was because he didn't asked palutenea to transport him because he feared dark pit would get mad at him Why would he even get mad at that ? I would let all of this slide if they came into terms with each other, which they kind of did but instead of doing that through a nice conversation or a little chat to resolve their difference they did it through sex and sex only , mind the problem here is not the sex but the way they resolve their conflicts) in which pit offered himself as if he was an object (he didn't even seemed to enjoy it based on the descriptions and looked rather in pain) all of this because he broke promises, because he chose duty over pitoo, and dark pit possessessines felt very wrong too soo he was not going to let pit go to defend humans because he "had it at his mercy" Geez putting it in that way it would be preferable if they just broked up and take their time

Overall their relationship in this story was very toxic

Little did they know that Hades was watching them the whole time.

Mmmmmmmhhh!
You go Pitto! Spank that ass!
Hey Pit big daddy in the house!

Great story but now I feel even more lonley... and horny

O.O Hades, a love expert...? WTF LMAO.
This was awesome

O_O Okay... Umm, good work Hades? Pit and Pittoo are such a cute couple 3

Amazing. Simply amazing. Round two anyone? :D

These books are the ones that need a sequel, but one will never come :(

-I sad now :cries:

I can't help but point out that their relationship is actually really awful. Like, Pit better get out of it quick. Pittoo being willing to give up his life to save Pit and making an effort to sometimes be gentle isn't enough to even things out. Based on your other fics along with this, he's straight up physically and emotionally abusive to Pit.

This could be your intention, but it doesn't sound like it is. I figured I'd let you know how it comes across. I hate to criticize like this, since I like your writing but I had to say something.

On one hand, I'm detecting noxious OOC seme/uke stereotypes, and abuse buzzwords I just can't ignore.

On the other hand, DAAAAAAAAAAAAAAANG. Homo moment right here. O/O

(And also, better this than Nintendo retconning the ending in SSB4 so Dark Pit decides to kill all humans with the Forces of Nature EVEN AFTER HE HAD OFFICIALLY HAD A HEEL FACE TURN AND MADE UP WITH PIT. WHY, Nintendo. ;_; )

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I love it
Pittoo and Pit Having sex its really cute and hard *w*
The nosebleed of pittoo was really Funny and cute
All is cute (?
XDXD
I love the fanfic
See ya!
—Black-WhiteKun