Found this because of your other story (I sometimes miss story alerts). Nice little snippet. And liked the end line, lol.

this was so wonderful, you must continue this, I'm begging you! (please!)

Good

Interesting

Very nice. Thanks so much for sharing.

The End? No... this story needs to continue. You just can't end it here & waste perfectly good "first" chapter. There's so much more to tell, so much more that can happen. There has to be more.
How many Fanfic authors are begged by their readers to continue a story. I guarantee that when the reviews start coming in, at the least 95% of your readers will be asking for more on this story. Guaranteed!
Please, just consider continuing this. If a story ever screamed to be told, it's this one. Just think about it...OK?
I'm clicking Follow: Story just in case.

I thought at first that Tim was a fire starter, but he is so much more. It seems he can control the elements, since he was able to raise that water spout to douse the bonfire. What a great talent to have. Bit daft of his father to think that he could beat it out of his son though. All that would do would be to make Tim emotionally unstable. His mother was much wiser, training Tim how to handle his powers.

Good story.

Oh you cannot stop there. This story begs for a sequel, and so do I.

Loved it! Would love to see a sequel where Tim has to use his powers in front of Gibbs and Tony to help save their lives!

lol "The cold never bothered me, anyway." I see what you did there!

Great story thanks for sharing!