Ash should've pulled a Red and just chased them all.

The only part of your story that I didn't love was the Lance shit. He came off as a piece of shit douche bag with arrogance a mile wide. I dislike him more than Oak. You get shackled, forced to do things for the league, and lose all sense of privacy. In return you get 2 months with my magnificence. I also hate how he treated Ash's freedom as a reward when it was what he should have had in the first place. I really fucking hate your Lance with a burning, pitch-fork passion. Now, please don't take that as a flame. He's written wonderfully with character depth, but he just gets on my personal nerves lol. Whelp, now to head over to the sequel.

Great story! Will read the sequel after this, hope it is just as interesting. The way you wrote this story was certainly different from any other story I have read. Also I especially liked the way Ash befriended Mewtwo. Though now having to be tracked by the league kinda sucks for them. Can't wait to see how everything plays out in the sequel.

Pretty good story [four of five stars]

Not to be a hater or flamer but Ash actually deserves what is happening to him for been so careless since day one, he made the mistake of taking Charmander Pokeball to thr Lab and now despite been a wanted person he keep using the same disguise instead of constantly changing it, heck he should try to change the color of his hair and avoid using Charizard in front of so many people.

So Ash could record what Oak was doing or saying like bro he has top of the line technology

is it me or ash is not complete with out pikachu at his side

Oh shit it’s lance

I like how you haven’t made Gary a huge jerk. Also the “for the greater good” kind of Personality professor oak has interesting

Yep raichu is adorable

Overpowered(OP) doesn’t mean undefeatable and the fact it took a Mega to stop him, he’s OP accept it

The attitude of Oak reminds me to Trash of the rising of the shield hero, because both are miserables and poor excuses of old men that harbor an unfair grudge against ash and naofumi for the actions of other people.

Also, when ash and naofumi were greeted by oak and trash the first time when they would begin their journey as pokemon trainer and legendary hero, ash and naofumi were notably treated badly by this old men, especially if it is compared with the treatment of the other trainers and heroes that were treated kindly and with respect.

Also, both old men intentionally and out of spite, caused that ash and naofumi were framed for a crime that they weren't responsible: ash was accused for theft of pokemon, and naofumi for attempt of rape, making that their journey started with a lot troubles in the beginning.

And after a great ordeal, ash and naofumi managed to prove their innocences and the old men in contrast were punished for their crimes, lost their powers and positions and both pieces of shit were always unrepetance for their actions, even they had the nerve of justifie it and defend their twisted points.

But if pikachu has lightning rod so does the ditto? So how was it affected by electric moves?

But blizzard was used on poliwrath?

Um, nidorino isnt a partial ground type. Nidoking is.