so good!

I second the Hokage.. I'm sixty eight... not dead... and everything still works fine...just not as often.

I'm only on paragraph two but the Hokage is already giving me Dumbledore vibes

This was really great! I've never seen anyone write anything even remotely similar to this, so it was a refreshing read. I really liked Anko and the kids' dynamics. Orochimaru was interesting, too. I really enjoyed reading!

... WHY ARE YOU JUST LEAVING IT AT THAT oOo!
I need moar oOo

Poor Anko.

Loved the story.

Orochimaru was frankly quite terrifying the way you wrote him.

...ok... It's been about 4 chapters and other then establishing orochimaru as a psychopath, a master of psychology and guilty of crimes against humanity. (Witch id like to say we already know) the plot has barely moved at all. We we know this already and we get there trapped. Get on with the story.

Well written, though the ending is abrupt & unsatisfactory. The mission has reached a conclusion but there is no resolution.

Honestly I am just disappointed in Minato, Jiraiya, & whoever else checked the seal. The only way to beat the AI in the box is not to play the game.

Great story.
I like the ending, it has a more realistic feel than the "everyone live happily ever after" types that are common.

This story isn't finished. Just because you write "the end" doesn't mean your story is over. I frankly feel cheated, in my opinion you deceived us by marking this as "complete", it simply isn't.

Very good story, I hope to find the sequel hahaha, greetings, see you, bye!

Wow what a bull stink filled story. So many errors in things it is beyond stupid. You need to re-write this story with a Beta reader.

As someone who has read all of your rational adventure to date, I cackled when Orochimaru used the MEW

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