I'm really not sure why it took me 20 chapters to work out that Resh Kolc is an anagram of Sherlock.

Here it is. Undeniable proof that Jared is as bad as his father is. 'Coz no sane man or woman can like X-ray and Vav.
Also, it's Ma'am, not Mam.
Also, why are they watching video feedback from tiny Scroll when they have huge-ass screens right behind their back? Very same where teams' names were displayed.

Okay.. While summary was interesting, fic itself was not quite what I expected. For one, you inventing things like Omega Grimm and Crystal Dust is something I don't like. I prefer setting to stay as close to canon as possible. If things can be done without inventing anything new, they should be.
Also, Crystal Dust Dust Crystals, something Roman stole in amounts enough to fill a train.
For another, I really was looking for a story about Jared trying to organise Jaune's love life. That should be plot in itself. Mixing it with original plot, that we all read countless times in various fics, and with your desire to make up things that never existed in canon.. Well, let's say that I'm not interested in it anymore.

Ok

If this is what you feel is the best solution, then I will wait and see how the new version goes. I did have fun reading this story, so thanks for writing it.

aw man, and i just caught up too.

Hey man, you do what you feel like you gotta do. I myself have felt the need to do a reboot of my own fanfic, simply because I couldn't stand the quality and direction of where my story was going. So I feel you man. Good luck, and do what you think is fun.

No worries, it happens to the best of writers when they have to scrap a lot of things on order to write their stories better. Good luck, and I can't wait to read whatever you work on next

You had Ruby call Jared by his proper name right when she first showed up, not Resh.

So jaunes decided to get started on his training sooner, and with more then pyrrha involved. I wonder if Jared knows he probably just made his father stronger then before. Blake made some more friends, good she needs them just as much a Weiss does.

Its always interesting getting to know your father outside just being your father. When you can look at him and call him a friend as well its actually much better, and a lot more fun.

I am the same guest who reviewed back on the 29 for this chapter.
I wanted to merely articulate myself better as my past review was a knee jerk reaction that I wrote before even bothering to finish the chapter.
In the end, I believe my problem was the exact characterization of Jared in this chapter vs his previous. You have went out of your way to show that in this story, Jared's personality and abilities are his nature, not a byproduct of his upbringing. In the first group of parents, he remained the same no matter who his mother was and with Cinder, he never met Jaune and yet his personality, level of knowledge and abilities was still unchanged. This mean's to me that Jared in the present day Vale would use the same tactic of mass murder and forced cannibalism, when put in the same or similar situation that even his admits his side are the villains in. Implying a protagonist based moral mindset that can be derailing. Either his 6 origins have equal sway over his current amalgam personality (mitigating the one) or the one that was initially sent back (the Cinder one) has greater degree of sway with the other 5 being subservient. Meaning that then Jared have just as much chance of becoming a villain just as bad if not worse then any seen in the present day Vale timeline.
It is difficult for me to get behind a main character whom I have liked until that point when after one revelation I start to compare him to the Imperial Japan's Unit 731.
I did however do you a disservice in that when you were writing about the meat grinders and it's direct aftermath, I did assign a number. Between 3,000 (the minimum number Unit 731 is know to have killed) and 14,300 (the estimated number killed in the Syrian civil war by chemical weapons attacks). That was me imposing my own numbers onto a story when you yourself didn't and for that I apologize.
On a different different and less depressing topic. I feel like you have a bit of a fixation on semblances. Not a bad thing as Rooster Teeth has been rather limited on some details leading the fandom to make things up. But Jared's obsession with them is notable. I have actually sat down and done the numbers and out of the 106 individuals that can be considered fighters (those with aura) only 43 have confirmed semblances. Roughly 40%. Team RWBY is a rarity as all four members have a semblance. Even among the Beacon staff, only 1 of the 4 teachers does. Ozpin appears to be something all together different, Glinda has telekinesis and both Port and Oobleck seem to be without one. If someone could point out the obsession and have an in-universe discussion about the nature of semblances it would be new ground that rooster teeth itself have yet to break.
In conclusion: A well written story with a balance of original characters interacting with the official one to create a rather dynamic plot. I still am unsure if I wish to continue with this story at the present time
PS: My apologies if this review became a ramble again. I merely wanted to state all my points.
PPS: Braum would be an amazing teacher at Beacon and with his shield as his swords all Grimm would be wiped out in mere hours under the might.

I get you need plot development for story and I love this story its great but don't you think he needs to actually be hiss dads wing man and actually help him get a girlfriend

Love the chemistry between the character. Hilarious interactions. Wonderful story my friend.

This chapter killed the fic for me, the OC wasn't so bad in the first chapters, but in this one out went completely Mary Sue and OP, what a crappy character, if you want to self insert at least mention that in the first chapter

There is no question about it. This story definitely deserves an M rating after this chapter. Yes there are no details but in a way that makes it worse. I can understand using dark elements for drama and compelling story telling as without the potential for failure success can be empty. But this crosses multiple lines. I though you were going to state a scorched earth policy. But this... if we were to put a movie rating on it, an X rating would be the minimum.
I enjoyed this fanfiction till now. Yes there was an undertone of melevelnce but after this chapter... I am not sure I can continue. I am sorry for I was enjoying it but at the bare minimum, you shout move this to an M rating and give a MUCH stronger warning at the front.