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It would have been great if you had put Candy and Grenda in the story, I mean, Mabbs needs her friends

"Shouty MC jerk Karkat"
I love it XD Also, Karkat's rant was great. This story is great. All of this is great! Keep up the awesome job!
I just found this story this morning and I plan to be with it for the rest of the story. :)
Can't wait for the next chapter.

take your time

Good luck wooing dipper considering he's straight as a board

Erifin ha

Aw no I need more

Awesome as always and I to
D some homestuck cosplayers who were gravity fall fans as well about your fic at a con I just got back from so hopefully more readers for you

Awesome awesome awesome I love you

Please continue I love it

Your idea of Mabel and dipper playing the game is interesting. But there's a few points that I need to criticize. First dippers and Mabel's personalities aren't really showed, we don't heard how they feel if they think it's exciting or suspicious, but I saw you tried. Then you completely rushed the game, before they get on the planet they should have done some stuff like we don't really see it's happening, like the alchemizations also they're weapons which could have been transformed with all the weird stuff they had around them. Then we don't see at all what happened to the Grunkle Stan when they left their house, he's supposed to be an adult he should have done something. Finally their objective on the planet isn't only to kill the denizen and the original rules are totally ignored.

I LOVE IT. LOVE IT LOVE IT LOVE IT. No, that wasn't Karkat's quirk, I genuinely love this. Although I believe you should have included Kankri somewhere because I can see him being friends with Mabel, with the sweater thing and everything. Before I found your story, I ironically was going to do a crossover too, involving Kankri and Karkat Pines.

YES. YES. PLEASE CONTINUE. This is very, very good so far! :D