I really like how the storyline goes,
Poor wizard, she has to wait 'till the morning, that was a great hit for her and her big ego.
you've described Li-Ming very well and I fell like something is going to happen between Leah and Kormac.

I really, really like your story.
It is very well written, calming and nice.
I like how you captured Li-Ming's arrogant but still caring altruistic attitude.
She's one of my favourite classes from Diablo III, among with the Necromancer.
They kick ass.

Dead fic by this point? A shame, I wanted to see how you'd introduce the Witch Doctor, Barbarian and Crusader.

cool!

Great story so far but FUCK dude it's SENSE.

Ignore my response ;P, I was replying to the wrong chapter.

That's fine, I'm just glad to see you're back. Your writing style is excellent enough to make up for a schedule ;)

You keep teasing me with glorious monk justice! Im glad you updated, ive been really looking forward to the confrontation with Magdha.

For actual critiquing, I feel like the descriptions were a bit quicker paced in this chapter. This isnt necessarily a bad thing, but I feel like I was being informed events transpired more than watching them occur, if that makes sense.

Still great stuff, looking forward to the next chapter!

Presently at work, but got the update note to say it was finally here, the old lady in currently fitting a garage door for gave me the dirtiest look as I did my best doctor zoidberg impression from one end of her garage to the other... Needles to say you might just have cost me my tip. Looking forwards to reading this when I get home. And I soppose I could be convinced to do a complete re-read of the whole thing on a nit picking hunt.

A new chapter has been promised... The wait is killing me, it's like that moment when your really getting into a show and then the season ends and your left thinking , well fuck now what do I do in the meantime.

So..where to begin? Absolutely great read matey, just wow one of the best ficks I've had the pleasure of reading. Blitzed the whole thing in a day or two using any spare moment I got. I've played Diablo 3 a bit and I almost wish I hadn't just so I could read this without spoilers.

Heroes of the storm is my most played game for a while now with li-Ming as my solid main, naturally. I love her cock sure personality and almost cheeky yet nonchalant edge and I must say you've nailed it whilst managing to give her more depth and somehow even more likability.

One thing I really look for in a good read is character development and your pretty good with that, a standout example being Lyndon. Really like where you going with him, can't help but root for him.

The changes you've made ,well slight edits, to the story line of the game makes sense and really help it flow and make it your own.

So what didn't I like? Since we are on the subject I may as well get this out the way. Some times you use the wrong words, an example would be since and sense which are used the wrong way round every time, without fail. Some times I have to re read a sentance twice before it makes sense. See what I did there? Now don't take this as an insult please it just niggles me that's all. Also there are the occasional repeat sentances and very rarely a repeat paragraph.

All that aside you general use of words sets a great scene and the action is on point and punchy, with a little bit of polish I could quite easily have mistaken this for an official novalision of the game, and to think I only found this looking for bit more li-Ming.

Keep up the great work, so upset that I now have to wait like all your other subscribers for the next chapter having had the pleasure of getting this far in a single binge read. Thank you and good night. *drops the figurative mike and exits stage*

Im ashamed to say I completely forgot the enchantress existed haha. Its been a little while since I actuslly played through the game. This felt a little shorter thsn your usual posts, but I definitely enjoyed it! Our party of three has become four. I wonder how Magdha will deal with SIX warriors coming for her.

Hey man, so far your story has been great, however, I think it's been awhile since you've uploaded.

Do you mind maybe clueing us in on your upload schedule so we know when you'll end up uploading?

Thanks

-Kden

Next chapter soon?
pwetty pweeeaaasse

Quick question, do you think you could provide some sort of upload schedule or just an approximate of when you upload?
For instance "I will try to upload every _ days?"
Thanks!