Congrats on your first story! The detective will come in the next one I'm guessing haha! :D Lovely work you should be very pleased of yourself my friend and I shall be sure to keep my eyes peeled for that sequel! :D :D :D

Oooh! Wow, this is intense...those guys are insane. Wonderfully well written again my friend and I can't wait for the finale! Good luck with your exam! I have my GCSEs coming up in 2 weeks too but take care and know I'm enjoying this story a lot! :D :D :D

Interesting... I like the air of mystery around Luke and his life in America. The whole mystery is very interesting and I hope you will continue this fic. I look forward to any updates on this ;)

I'm enjoying reading this fic!
I think you've kept true to the characters but have made sure to take their new ages into mind with their actions.
I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes!

I'm seriously looking forward to how to present this! Amazing work!

I really like it! Keep going!

Not a bad start. A few slight grammitical errors and run-on sentences, but overall a solid start. Emmy and Luke are very much in-character, and your story posesses that slight air of excitement that I would get from a Layton-esque story. Some areas feel a bit rush, so I would recommend you work on transitions and pacing. Other than that, fantastic job. I'd love to see more.

Oooh! A dramatic first chapter to a Laytonesque story! Terrific work indeed on the first chapter! Already it's intense and Emmy has to find her missing friend already :( Luke's change in character and back story are interesting but one tiny little note is that Luke using the word 'git' is very slightly ooc. I'm not usually very picky when it comes to reviewing but if you changed it to 'He deserved it' or something less offensive sounding it would seem in character. It's weird to imagine Luke being expelled and usually someone wouldn't be expelled for just getting into a fight, more like excluded if you know what I mean? Just those little things to make it more realistic should be amended but other than that amazing work! I do hope you continue this and best of luck with the next chapter! Plant peace for the planet and take care! :D :D :D :D