I already did a review but I just wanted to say instead of it was "good". It was AMAZING! I can't stop reading or thinking about it. It's so good thank you for this wonderful fan fiction. Also if you can, can you send me part 11? I read this warning signs about them probably doing "that". Thanks for making this wonderful fan fiction!

This was a good story I loved reading it! And I would love to see part 11.

I know what it's like to lose a friend. Not quite in that way, but still. One of my friends died at 14. I understand why Jamie did what he did 100%.

bruh im neg to you but this is one of my favourite stories of the category its jus so well written and it really gets you emotionally connected to those involved so honestly, fuckin good job and if you dont mind sending me the chapter that'd be awesome. after all, i AM your biggest fanboy c;

I truely enjoyed this story. If it had spelling or grammar mistakes I did not notice because I was so emerced into the story. Now if I have those problems please forgive me as I'm writing this review with my 3ds haha. Anyway, I totally see Jack being submissive and shy to Jamie and personaly I felt you kept them in character considering the situations you put them in. I've only just got into this fandom but I love what you have written. I was hoping for a final chapter [not necessarily sex tho I'll read that chapter so you can send it to me haha], but what did Manny said? Is there a real reason Jamie is different? I was expecting a twist where Manny would choose Jamie as a new Guardian. Of what I'm not sure. But I'm still satisfied how you ended this. Excellent job all around. :]

Nice, I really like it. LOVE how North had Jack delivered to Jamie like that!

Some paragraphs are way too long. Longer than 6 lines and they should be split in two. You also have trouble with punctuation, using commas instead of dots. Reading books helps you improve your writing. Also, to get more reviews and feedback you should wait at least 2 weeks between each update so readers have the time to have caught up with the latest chapter before you update.