| Reviews for The Pocky Game |
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   Angelic LuNa chapter 1 . 4/30 it funny and good. i love it. please continue |
| KatoGS123 chapter 1 . 2/15 Meanwhile in Luffy’s mind: Pervert Luffy: dammmm we just got some action! Childish Luffy: What’s action? Capt Luffy: nothing a kid should worry about Protective Luffy: does that mean Nami is Luffy’s wife now? Luffy protect Nami! Capt Luffy: great... the Marvel version of us sees Nami as a mate Perv Luffy: GOOD! That means we can bang her later! Idiot Luffy: uhhhhhhh what’s banging? |
| Cassi0chan chapter 1 . 12/30/2016 It was very sweet. I enjoyed it. |
| HeartandSoul123 chapter 1 . 4/29/2016 This was an incredibly sweet and cute one-shot :) I was grinning at their interactions together! Not to mention how clever you made the game go on, and then a passionate kiss to seal the deal! I really loved this one-shot :) Too cute, and the dialogue was amazing between her and Luffy. I would love another one-shot from you, and I appreciate this adorable story. Pocky forever :D |
| GirugameshPanda chapter 1 . 4/7/2016 Nice one-shot, very sweet and to the point. |
| AboveNzT chapter 1 . 11/6/2015 Cute |
| snowy-wish9 chapter 1 . 8/30/2015 It was cute~ but i think you make nami hit luffy too much |
| Kaoru likes One Piece chapter 1 . 6/10/2015 Cute story |
| davidjoker chapter 1 . 5/29/2015 that was a really sweet story. I liked it a lot. |
| One Piece Concrit chapter 1 . 4/19/2015 This was a sweet story to read, so thank you. It would have been nicer to see less dialogue and more prose to story, and this would have helped to make the story a little deeper and more complex as it’s quite simplistic at the moment and feels a little rushed at times. Adding more character thoughts lets the reader fully understand a character too and any ooc-ness is easily avoided in this way. It also will smooth out any odd pacing, which there was some of in this story. Aside from a few grammatical errors, the other main issue found was that the romance felt a bit forced, and this can easily be avoided in the future by adding more depth and emotion to the characters, as well as fleshing out the dialogue. Overall this was a sweet story and a very cute read. Best wishes! |
| Jurabi Therion chapter 1 . 4/9/2015 Loved this one-shot! It's so cute! :D |
| manicherryblossom33 chapter 1 . 4/4/2015 Awww. I think it was cute |
| Guest chapter 1 . 2/19/2015 It was good you should make more! :3 |
| eLf chapter 1 . 2/18/2015 Good job bro! I really like it. Pocky game between Luffy n Nami so refreshing. I really like this pairing! I'm sad 'cause Nami take a break from manga... Ahh... I miss her a lot. And I really miss Luffy and Nami. |
| Thisaccountmustbedelted chapter 1 . 2/15/2015 I thought it was cute. Kapow is an interesting choice of a sound effect, it 's not a normal choice. I want to hear more from you. |
