Loved the story

Cute story, like the twist. On your future stories, use your spell check and grammar check more often. Please don't be hurt, your story is fun to read and I hope you write more. When you hit college, you will have to take freshman composition 1 & 2 ( all freshman do as part of the core curriculum). You will be fine, good luck on your future stories.

V/r,
Steve

Alright I just wanted to say you have a good story, but I skipped over to the last chapter to check the writing and saw it didn't really change. Everytime a new character starts to speak they should be separated in a new line, because otherwise it gets hard to read.
Again it's a good story, but the talking characters should be spaced out.

man sabine and hera act like polyamory is the evil satan of everything. but i am polyamorous, but with no one to date

yep pregnant

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It was a nice chapter but a little too much romance i mean why did you include ashoka in this?

Why? Why? it made me cry just thinking about the ghost crew and the babies. Why did you have to kill him?

Very nice chapter

amazing, truly amazing

I'm debating wether to insult you or praise you. Pull another switch, and I will flip.

Hey, you spelled my name wrong!

(The director from the new scooby-doo commercial) And, I'm back

Ya know what? you were right

We are now entering... the damn-it zone. (discordant notes)