Canon naruto? You didnt improve his skill? Tsk tsk

god why do author's use the same dumb knucklehead mentality for him if you're trying to change things then at least give him some smarts and understanding it's hard to read idiotic Naruto stories anymore

Not bad but the OC ruins the story.

cool story

I really digging this story so far, I'm loving how Naruto/Tayuya's relationship has progressed, becoming closer and realising how important they are to one another, also cool idea with making Tayuya the Jinchuriki of the other half of Nine Tails, though I'm curious to see how this would affect the 4th Shinobi War, assuming the story goes that far and in that direction, personally I hope you don't try and stick to canon too much and craft something new and uniquely yours. Loving the Kakashi/Shizune interactions and growth, they're both adorable. My one gripe I have is, Kuki, for how little she is in this story thus far and her importance in the story, she is far to OP, but I'm going to look past that for now because i'm fairly sure of the direction you're planning to take (assuming you continue this story). If you are going the direction I think you are, then I don't know how I feel about Kuki being Minato's younger sister (Naruto's Aunt) maybe she'll join Naruto and destroy the Akatsuki and 4th Shinobi War will be prevented entirely, who knows...well technically you do but I digress. Stay Awesome!

I've loved this story, but i really think this last chapter had too many holes in it. Especially at the end with this Kuki girl. Shikaku and Inochi would've been close by as well. I'm sure Kakashi and Shizune will be there soon but I'm not sure what your plans with your OC are.

Still, complaints aside, great story. The unfulfilled Jiraiya X Tsunade romance broke my heart, so well done. It felt more impactful than cannon. You're making Kuki seem a little too strong though, in my opinion.

Kuki seems horribly overpowered and as has been mentioned, mostly unneeded. Even giving the benefit of the doubt with her joining Akatsuki, her coming from nowhere and instantaneously taking out Naruto, Tayuya, Konan, and Hinata while barely breaking a sweat is pushing believability to the absolute limit. Combine that with the her first appearance where she single handedly takes on two Anbu, the (in your own words) strongest female Jonin, Tayuya who had trained with Jiraiya and become a Jinchuriki, and Fū in her tailed beast state and you get a character that just seems forcibly overpowered with a wide range of jutsu for any situation and no weaknesses. Hopefully we see a change to this within the next few chapters though, either through her being put in her place by another Character or at the least being shown having weaknesses.

Kuki seems like an unneeded character. She comes from no where and is just randomly stronger than anyone. It feels like you made her super op just so she can kick everyone's ass. Followed a lot of cannon mostly and now the end of this chapter seems like it was the only way to add conflict. Hope something happens soon to balance this out.

I'm expecting a simple "Need a hand?" Punch right about now. And I'm kinda pissed at you for that BTW. I'm a Hinata fan through and through. Not naruhina. Hinata. Well anyway. Hope to see more soon.

A well done chapter. Nicely done with the fighting scene against Pain. Showed how much Tayuya and Naruto grew as a ninja as well as a new signature move they created. The meeting with Nagato was nicely done. Felt sad for Shizune as she found Kakashi and Kakashi talking to his dad. It turned out well though as they finally confessed to one another. When it thought all was good with the scene after Nagato’s death, it would seem Kuki has some other ideas. Nicely done with the beating and torturing scene, but it would seem like Hinata comes to the reduce. However: will she be able to protect them? Thank you. Keep up the good work.

I vote Naruto discovers gateway of the Saccubus dimension and I vote Naruto enter the Saccubus dimension.

Can we kill kuki off already this bitch needs to die and is useless trash to the story we already have enough op characters

I am looking forward to chapter 15 and I vote Sonic X character Amy Rose be added in the story.

well this was cool can't wait for more

well this was interesting Konan's gonna die like the cow she is