seriously

Ok, i like your story with all the description in it but i would recommend you to make paragraphs if needed and please continue!

Yep, enjoyed it definitely. :D

So the wolf that humphrey ran into was an old friend of his. It's a good thing that he did since Brent or Legend saved Kate. But I can't help but wonder why was legend bleeding a little when Humphrey ran into him, and how did he know exactly where Kate was. I can't wait for the next chapter to find out how exactly he's gonna get through the three wolves. I still noticed a few spelling mistakes, but only like one or two. You did a good job with not using to many camas this time, keep up the good work and cya when you post the next chapter.

Great chapter

It's great, but it could be little longer.

try indenting your paragraphs.

Who could this be? Dont let us wait for too long. :D Great story so far, minor spelling errors.

This is a good first chapter. It's a little short but it's understandable since this is your first story on here. I noticed a few words that were misspelled. Try not to over use the cama. A little hint of knowing when to use the cama, say the sentence in your head or out loud and when you have to take a breath put a cama or period. Other than that good job with the chapter and looking forward to reading the next chapter.

P.S: If you ever need someone to proof-read your chapter or if you need help just let me know. I will try to help you as best as I can.