I really like this story. I thought their conversation was believable. I can picture Mamura acting and speaking that way. Would love to read more of your work.

Mazume is so cute, I am dead.
I liked your one shot very much, and your comparison too! Very nicely done ;)

I liked how she described Mamura as the sun, and their overall interaction with each other is very cute. You did a nice job, and I don't think I saw any errors. This was a nice read to past the time, I like it! :)

Ommmggg ... sooooo cuuuttee thank you for writing such a beautiful story

Ahaaa. That was cute. I love Mazume. I was hoping for moments like this in the manga, but I'll settle for sweet stories like yours. Great job!

That was BEYOND cute. Good job, I loved it:)

Ugh That was cute :D I just finished the manga, it was all about up and down, I was so afraid about Yosano rejecting Mamura ! I open your story when she almost chose Yoshio... Finally I finished the manga first, and your story made me remember my feelings about them :D

Thank you ! I like your style :)

awwww 33 that was soo cute :))) i like it soo much :D thaaanks

So cute! Good job!

I didn't notice or find any mistakes. This was wonderfully written. We appreciate your effort and hardwork writing this story. It's very nice and I like it a lot.

I love how you portrayed Suzume (yeah, she was a bit OOC) xD, and Mamura's still his usual blushy, embarrassed shy, cute self. ;)

I hope I don't sound like a whiny spoiled brat but I hope I can read more stories from you in the future! :) All the best!