Okay so i like the idea of this plot. And the first two chapters were good. But then it seems to jump in time a little to Clarke being pregnant and loving murphy. But we didn't get to see the journey to how they fell in love and became a family, so we as the readers will not be able to emotionally connect with the story and it kinda confusing. But it was all well written and no grammar or spelling mistakes. Keep it up. And thank you for sharing your art.

a good story to turn a bad day upside-down

Love this story, and the shoutout to Buffy. Great job all around with an unexpected pairing. Thanks for sharing.

The earthy language, it's hard! Unfortunately not really practical to have to translate that with the dictionary :(
Otherwise I think I understand the globlalité on chapter except one little thing. Anya wants as second while they are foreigners? And inbreeding history, I am lost :X

Kanli

Ok I admit I'm a little lost.
I read the first chapter, so if I understood everything, Clarke was captured by the land that Murphy is more or less become one of them, right?
And there they found that Raven had left with Clarke, right? And they go find her?

Do I have good so far, before I get into next? :o

Kanli

Clarke and Murphy ? Mmh.. I'm skeptical, but we'll see how you manage the rest! Because Clarke still does not really seem to care about more than that Murphy and the same in reverse.
Otherwise I like the first chapter, but I'll have to read it quietly to properly understand everything (some things have escaped me.. :X)
In any case I'll come to devour the next chapters as soon as possible! Good luck for the follow!

Kanli .

I need to be sincere! I don't like this story. It is missing a lot to be coherent, like a translation for the "grounder language". If you made one and I missed it I'm sorry, but I believe you didn't. Please let me know if I'm wrong. And because of that I had to read over 1/4 of the dialogs and try to take their meaning from the context and that doesn't make fun to read! I love Murphy as a character but didn't like this version at all. But i wish you the best in your future endeavors.

I love how you mixed I'm the last moment humour while the rest was serious, great chapter!

First off while I can still remember, the first time you wrote 'Octavia' it put 'Ocatavia' instead, and in the last part you forgot the 'and' between 'Clarke ### Murphy' ;)

This was so good! It really rounded things up, and it was angsty even though you didn't go into to much detail! How you talk about Murphy's hidden feelings were good, and all the other pairings were brought on nicely.
Amazing last chapter )

This was really good! What was Clarke's actual mission? Just to kill him- why?
But how the other delinquents are acting is really good, and Finn seemed appropriately let down :]
How you explained what actually happened after the war was great, and it gives us background information!
Really good.

This was interesting! Who was the girl? All of it confused me a little, but I like how we saw everything that was happening and Raven admitting that Finn's a bastard, and how O supported her.
VAMOW!

How do you know so much grounder language?! And the chapter was cool :) I don't actually mind a pairing that isn't Bellarke because of how you're writing this!

Raven was epic! This did actually put focus on how she would be homesick, etc! And the bit about Harper, cool! Finally putting into play what happened

This was riveting! The fight scene was good, and you put in knowledge that we needed without there being too much.
Are Clarke and Murphy going to be a pairing, though?