WHOA! That’s ABSOLUTELY GORGEOUS!

I really love reading things I’d forgotten about from you, they’re like a little gift that’s been waiting, all this time to be opened, making them even more special! Thank you for writing this!

My favorite line was "She didn't understand that she was the fire, I was the one consumed, and if we weren't careful we would burn the whole world down." Very... them. It's also cute :)

Liked this :D

Perfect and very sweet!

My good golly Ned. Jesus Becky. Holy crapinnahat

I loved this.

Thanx

This is so beautiful... I can't even...just perfection.

I apologize for taking so long to get to this! Bear with me as I review and I hope it's not too all over the place because I was jotting notes down as I read so I wouldn't forget. Writing is hard enough by itself and there are some people who can write in first person and some people who can't. You definitely can. As much as this had a very defined plot with the fire and stripping the baggage it had a feel of a character study. "Bruises in my mind." I love that you added that in. Too often people focus on the physical only. The memories being as daunting as what caused them in the first place. "The closer I came to death...the more determined I was to live." Showing her drive. You pay so much attention to detail that it makes me so happy to read your work. Him choosing to sit closer to her on the rock. Painting a great picture talking about the ashes and fire of a phoenix. How she was born out of the ashes of her past life. You talk about that wall that's between them or has been between them then go on saying "...he would take a step away and it would hurt." I was so pulled into the story that was pleasantly surprised to see Daryl's point of view too. "She didn't understand that she was the fire, I was the one consumed, and if we weren't careful we would burn the whole world down." Favorite line in this whole piece. Remember me JUST talking about your attention to detail...here it is again with saying how her hands were shaking when touching him the first time. She is a strong woman but she's human and it shows more than her attraction to him but her fear of losing him. Love that you switched back to Carol because those last two paragraphs were a perfect way to tie the beginning to the end and I love when there is bows like that. I need you to know that even without saying who was who your first person was on point and I knew exactly who was thinking by their mannerisms and their train of thought.
Don't stop, okay? :)

I read this last night on Nine Lives & LOVED it! Great story! :)

Great atmosphere, Carol's introspection reads as true for her in a big way and Daryl's take on what she says is really insightful- loved it x

wow, that was incredible

:D Love it!
Crystal

Really really good story!

Great story!

Awesome... will you continue?

Loved it. I think the first person worked really well for this. It's so introspective in some places that it kind of seemes like a natural choice. Thanks for sharing this!

Wow! Excellent! Where do I go to vote!