Trent better have gotten in trouble by the school like damn or with he cops

Uuuuuuuuuuuuuummmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm...wtf...I’m ADHD as fuck and even I couldn’t follow this plot twist...ummm as interesting as this twist is...it’s a bit convoluted...I expected Clare to be the child of two of the primes and was going to change into a Prime upon her death and reformat, and then help Optimus...NOT DRAGON OPTIMUS...regular old revived Optimus to defeat the Fallen. There is too much going on in this twist and it’s literally become an expositional onslaught that literally takes way way too much to comprehend properly. I absolutely love this fanfic...at least until Optimus became a dragon and then this Titan...stuff. If you have to a character explain a plot twist in entire long chapter for the entire length of it then it’s not a twist...it’s more of a nuclear plot explosion that throws everything we know out the window. I’m not trying to bag on your creativity because I love Clare she is literally my personality x2. It’s this Dragon and titan thing, it doesn’t make sense...you didn’t lay clues out until the chicken scratch thing and that just seemed like a Prime plot device which was awesome...but they didn’t give warnings to the reader that something like Titans were suddenly going to overtake the plot. creative expression is great...but when you are writing a fanfiction within the confines of a fandoms canonical universe then throw in a completely NEW device that throws the current plot you were writing into a blender you lose the reader. I literally cannot read past this chapter and that saddens me because while a few times I felt you really needed to use the Witwicky parents and their pets more your plot was still great. If it were me, at the point where Clare dies I would split this new plot you’ve written into a separate story as an extreme AU. And kept writing within the confines of Clare getting through the next 3 movies and changing the plot to fit how your character affects the canonical plot. I’m sorry but this many parents gets way way way too confusing. Besides it feels like all her struggles to become a true Autobot kinda are throne in the trash because now she’s the daughter of a God...Titan..thing. At this point it seems that her journey to this point means nothing. I hate having to give long ass reviews where I ramble but I just loved this story that I can’t really just keep my opinion quiet.

The story is so unique and awesome. I have never read something like this before and I love your humor. You are doing great sweetie. I love it!

Sweet im so excited!

How about an energon Crystal necklace or something. She was found with it and it's the only clue to her origins so she always wears it. It could be a high quality Crystal that slowly gives her energy by contact so she doesn't starve.

I want her creators and the love interests to stay the same. The transformers can also us solar power to get energy. It makes sense because they have been to other planets where there was no energon and survived. So have her use solar power. Humans need sun anyway so it naturally works! Just some ideas!

I think that idea your friend had is a wonderful one, and I would adore reading such a story. I also believe that keeping Prowl and Jazz as creators and the twins as love interests would be nice, but that’s just me. I love those characters, and I love the way Clare interacts with them. It’s one of the reasons I love this story so much! But, I’m sure whatever you decide will be wonderful.

One idea I play with a lot is that the have a primal coding that scans the dominate life force with the most intelligent thought. So the would end up scanning humans instead of something like, insects or bacteria. This is so that they blend in and their nanities can heal the parts that are stored in subspace. Only a medic can disable the primal coding, and it’s really hard for a bot to detect the disguised cybertronian, the only part of her that would be from her original body is a sliver of her spark, and an energon converter, maybe a processer.

Hope this helps, I can’t wait for another story about the twins

I like how jazz & her connected, but I think she didn't get enough time with them as her creators. You could do an origin like sari had in transformers animated.

If I remember correctly, cybertronians can survive off of alcohols (like hard liquor, or rubbing alcohol), it’s just not as efficient as Energon and it can clog their systems. I think they can also survive off of gasoline but it’s even worse for their system. They’d need frequent tune ups, and it doesn’t give them as much energy as energon, so they’d need it more often.

Hey, whatever you think is best, go for it! By the way, I LOVED the original version, and this is FanFiction. If you want it to happen, then you can make it happen!

Even still, I'm excited to see what you come up with.

Yes for Prowl anf Jazz and yes for the Twins, tbey dont get enough loving from anybody

I loved this story, it brought me many smiles and squeals. I literally read through all the chapters in a day.

Then...

You made her into Primus daughter, derailed the whole fandom and even made her a dragon that's also a titan and decided to mix in a whole lot of OCs I couldn't be bothered to remember. The Mary Sue struck true, and I can't describe how disappointed the chapters after her "death" made me. In case you decide to redo this story I would be more than happy to give it a shot again, just PLEASE don't derail it like you did. Sometimes its exciting reading a story that leaves the tried, tested and original beaten path of the storyline, but you literally took a spaceship, left the storyline burning in your wake, and infested it with plot bunnies magicked from the wild imaginations of every Mary Sue author out there.

So, getting that out of my way... Yes. PLEASE return to writing, I would love to see this story redone into what it once was! The twins and her... they were precious. I want then back! T_T

This is a great story... But honestly in chapter 34 when sideswipe says "no fragging way..." I was hoping to read about an unplanned pregnancy. The chapters after she died took a long time to make sense because it was in almost no way at all related to the transformers, that said they were however very well written and detailed. I honestly hope that this story continues with the twins, they are most definitely my favorite. Please keep writing.

If you choose not to build off of Claire, bring back Sideswipe and Sunstreaker as the love interests! I love the way you write them! As for creators I think it would be cool if it were one of the older Autobots. Like Ironhide or Optimus.