For some reason this fic is reminding me of the SKIP BEAT! anime and the Shoukugeki no Soma anime.

This is really awesome and yes I do hope that monty gets well soon. Just a little with separation. To separate authors note from story, have the author's not in bold and with authors note written at the top. That way it flows easier and prevents the reader from being slightly confused. Other than that, this was really good. Keep it up and cant wait for more XD

This is excellent and very well written, but you should find another way to tell who is speaking, rather then just quotations at the end. I hope you keep this up.