I have noticed, you always use 'A certain (color of hair)' and was going to say. I find that fine but maybe you should change things up like for Eli, you could say the blonde, Russian, whatever and also for the other characters what describes them. I know you won't change this story but just a tip for your next stories.

-FG300
I love this story btw! :)

Wow, we have the same ships... I think.

Well, some moments here really make me feel giddy, and force me to make weird faces, haha.

The scene the café with Tsubasa, Honoka, and Erena was a bit intense.

Oh, blood... *sigh* well, can't do anything now, but read the next chapter to find out what happens.

The story is great so far, and you too. :)
Thank you, for this amazingly wonderful story.

Oh, this is so wonderful. The first chapter already got me hooked, it was great, and nicely written.

About what Honoka suffered, those flashbacks, and what she did with the matchmaking.. they're all great.

Thank you for this, and I shall continue to read. _

Alright, just actually finished reading this chapter.

Uhh... Hmm...

Not sure how to respond besides, it was good. At least you managed to finish the story, something most people, even me, aren't really capable of doing, but the ending kinda seemed like a cop out and was a little underwhelming at that. To top it off, the clock...That Damn clock. Besides that you did an excellent job with the interactions between Honoka and Tsubasa, and almost perfectly captured Umi as a person for the last few chapters. However Maki seemed a little out of character just forgiving Honoka with no problem at all. And sure, it seemed dark, but not enough to actually be constituted as a dark story, maybe a little on the golden brown side, but it's not dark. Maybe if Honoka killed someone and framed someone, or something along the line of that.

If this really is a completed story like you make it seem like it is. Then I rank this story a Jman 7/10. Worth reading.

Have an excellent 2016, and do a sequel. I'll follow you just in case you do.

Oorah, have a nice day.

-CJM80

Sequel? Nope. It's good as it is. All is well. It is indeed a merry christmas, with this true ending. I was so worried about Honoka. I... nevermind~ But since they got together, I have no more [emotional] complaints. It could have been more detailed for a more dramatic effect, but I'll leave that to the imagination. Thank you for the great story!

I can't describe the feeling but your story really wants me to ask many things about it, and that's good! Anyways, I like the way you mixed the romance and dark genre because it's way too good! You have my respect, Author-san! Till you next story!

i really enjoyed reading all of this!
thank you for writing it, i look forward to reading your other works

alrighty then... i'm just gonna come out and say it... What... The Actual Fuck, just happened?

no seriously, what the actual living hell was that? i mean it's not bad, it's just kinda confusing and almost uncalled for. what, did aliens do this or some shit? it was aliens. the only problem is really just that the whole story just went full blown m night shyamalan on this bitch, and i mean signs m night, not 6th sense m night either...

but all criticism aside, well done on completing this version of the story can't wait to see if the other variation can result in a more interesting ending. only time will tel which one has a better ending, okay Jman out

I'm crying T-T

This chapter is a different kind of NSFW... It almost made me cry and lose it in the middle of work. I mean, it's Honoka, and knowing that she would not say goodbye, and disappear... Queue in Oku Hanako's Garnet.
After recovering (thru SIF and other fics) I realized that Tsubasa would become some sort of a Makoto or Kyon to get Honoka back, which can link both endings. (and the good one possible even without this ending)
The thing is, who and what exactly is "Honoka"?

One... Abbreviation: WTF?!~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Whoa! Is this the bad ending? I'm kind of sad of Honoka's disappearance, and I never expect that there would be some sort of supernatural happening here, you know like Honoka being a spirit or something that couldn't or shouldn't be remembered.
Hhmm, I want the eight members of muse to at least apologize to her or realize that they did something they should be sorry for...

The other thing is... How come that the old clock belongs to Tsubasa? How come it was place in Honoka's room without her knowing it?

I'm a bit confused about other things, but... Well, there's still another ending, so I'll just look forward to it... All in all, this story is really great and interesting :)

Wow. I really didn't expect that to happen, but I guess it makes sense in hindsight. But this is a great chapter. Now I can't wait to see how connect your endings together.

what !? Is this the bad ending!?

nice to see you again.
A great chapter,It's make me can't stop read it again...So nice !
I hope you can update as soon as,keep it up,bro !