So Gabe's "scent" lasted on Percy for over 4 months while he was underwater the whole time? Yeah, this story is way too poorly written to continue reading.

The spelling, grammar and word use isn't too good thus far. The way Percy and Serena talk is strange and Percy has 0 curiousity whatsoever. This isn't mentioning what seems to be a rejection of all other pantheons existences by not bringing them up where they should be included and the discludement from any exposition Serena gives.

MAKE PERCY WEAR A DRESS

MAKE HIM STAY AS A GIRL I WANNA SEE WHAT HAPPENS

So Percy is forced into a gender swap and the reaction of his so called family and friends is to laugh at him...
I'm confused, are we supposed to like this guys ? Because they are a bunch of assholes

Knowing what Percy's life have been like. I find hard to believe that he would be attracted to a violent girl like the Thalia you write about. She would just remind him of his abusive step-father.
On a more general note, I really don't understand why so many authors seems to think that making the girl abused the boy she will end up dating is a good idea. It's frankly pretty disturbing.

Thalia replied to herself.
What?

Hello! I don't know why I am reviewing but, there are multiple things you could work on in your writing-um future indevers...

Kinda disappointed that they didn't see Thalia's "death" in Percy's mindscape.

“I’m going to teach you how to throw water at people” is now my new favorite quote from this story lmao

When did percy go back to being a boy? You never specified how. Yeah... Idfk if I'm 3 yrs late

This was really good.

You could've taken it in a lot of different directions, and I think I would've preferred most of them- it felt like you really rushed things after (s)he fell into Tartarus. I would've liked to have more Percy/Thalia bonding over the rest of their tasks. And just more fluff in general.

And the thing with the Philosopher's Stone: Was Kronos the guy's master, or did you have a secondary villain you decided to discard?

You also didn't really resolve the drama with Nico and Bianca. Does he forgive her, do they get along, or do they carry on hating each other? And also, is she unable to leave the hunters after joining? Or was she unwilling?

So, if Serena can go anywhere there's water from her lake why doesn't Percy just visit and grab a bucket of it to take back to camp? If they need Poseidon to do it, I'm sure he would.

Also, with the way water works wouldn't Naiads eventually be able to go more or less anywhere that there's water? I can completely understand why you wouldn't do that in your fic, but theoretically...

I'm being over analytical, probably, but the idea hit me and it's bothering me.

I thought Artemis was giving them their first task.

How do I delete someone else’s story?