Sorry for the delay. An interesting chapter with the debut of the Kalos champion, Hera. A champion with her main partner being a Ninetales. Really interesting.

The Team Shadow, a team enough powerfull to make a champion be scared for a while. I assume that two were low-ranking grunts, since she was able to defeat easily.

I can't wait for know more champions and more about that interesing Team Shadow. Great job :)

Welp anptetty good chapter , 10/10. Welp mom out, Byez!

Other than some capitalization issues, like Pokemon and Team Shadow.

And ignore Farla. She does the same to every Pokemon story she reads, unless it's her friend in real life.

Nice chapter, but I have a few things to add.
Team Shadow should be capitalized, as well as Pokemon Champions, as they are both proper nouns. Pokemon should always be capitalized, as that is canon. I have gone through all websites and found Pokemon to be capitalized. Farla was wrong on that aspect.
Either way, nice chapter and will be waiting for the next update.

A nice chapter, that's for sure. I like Hera so far, but I don't know much about her yet. The plot looks as entertaining as ever, and I'm looking forward to two weeks from now.

(Is it pushy to ask where my OC stands?)

Welp I'm liking this story idea so far, so here's my oc.
Name: Charlie Kyle (Also Called Ck)

Age: (Between 15-17) 17

Gender: male

HomeTown: Canalave City, Sinnoh

Personality: a rather nerdy and smart man. Ck is very selfless and kind, but is rather cocky and slightly rash. Ck, while appearing to be very humorous, is actually a very serious person. Ck is very levelheaded, but freaks out when attacked by nightmares.

Appearance: a tall Caucasian man with marine blue eyes, messy brown bowlcut hair and a scar on his left cheek. He also has a tattoo of a white scarf in his neck (explained later)

Outfit: wears a blue headband with a metal part on the forehead (Ninja headband!) has a blue leather jacket covering a black t-shirt. The jacket has the logo of a lucario in the back. He has brown leather gauntlets. He also has blue ripped jeans and brown combat boots. He had blue tinted goggles.

Pokemon(Only 5): Bert the Lucario (calm, has a blue headband, partner) Sky the Staraptor (Energetic, has a yellow bandana) Cave the Golem (easygoing, has a green tie) Sips the Swampert (Lazy, has a brown bow tie, gotten from a trade.) Vic the Umbreon (cool and collected. Has small brown glasses) ck loves all of his pokemon.

Preferred Lengendary(Any NOT listed except for Arceus): Dialga the time pokemon

History: born in the peaceful but busy Canalave city, Ck was always intrested in fighting types. One day the town was visited by Riley who gave out Several pokemon eggs. Ck got a riolu egg and named him Bert. The 2 bonded well, and at a late 14 he went on his journey. Along the way he met a resident of Floaroma town who not only have him his pokedex, but was told by professor Rowan to be his companion. The woman, named Eve, became fast friends with Ck as they caught several pokemon, Ck soon catching or getting the future members of his party of 5. One day at 15 he and Eve, who fell in love with Ck, we're attacked by team galactic members. Eve decided to fight back but was killed by an insane member with a Garchomp. Ck, shocked, ran away, scarred for life. Putting a tattoo of her favorite white scarf in his neck, he sadly continued his journey 3 months later after the funeral. With a new task of avenging Eve, he blazed through the league in record time, defeating Cynthia's team easily, nearly killing her Garchomp in one shot. Cynthia, shocked, asked one thing: Why? What causes him to do this? In tears Ck explained his story and asked the smart former champ if he could do anything to bring Eve back. She then in detail explained that Dialga could transport a dying Eve from the past to today in a hospital so she can be healed and saved. With a new resolve ck and his team traveled the region, looking for signs of Dialga to save Eve. But as of currently, Ck is starting to feel that he should move on. Whom will he choose, Save Eve, or
A new girl?

Family: Thomas Kyle and Mary Kyle (parents and pokemon breeders)

Crush: the deceased Eve (a kind woman with long blond hair and brown eyes with a white scarf) but feels conflicted

Extra Info: fights team galactic. Has Vic the Umbeon create "virtual battles" that ck can control in his mind to train. Likes fancy gloves. Jokes about being a future mayor.

Questions: my own. Why is Venasaur labeled as a legendary? Shouldn't the Kanto one be mew or Mewtwo? Articuno? Why Venasaur? It's the final form of bulbasaur, not a legendary!
Then a question Ck asks himself and others: "What would you do if you could change fate? Stop a death. Save someone's life? And what problems would that make? That is what I would like to know."
Anything Else I forgot?: nope
Welp I'm out. Hope you update soon, Byez!

Farla makes good points about grammar and use of the language, but I think she's off base about OC's. That's just her OPINION (which she's entitled to, of course). MY opinion is that OC stories, though challenging and a bit of work, can be a lot of fun and quite rewarding for all who participate! I'm looking forward to reading your story...the start is very intriguing! :D

Don't listen to Farla!

Your story is great :)

You wouldn't capitalize animal or mouse or dragon, so you shouldn't capitalize words like pokemon or pikachu or charizard. The only time you should capitalize it is if you're using it as the pokemon's name, ie, Ash's pikachu is called Pikachu. This is because you only capitalize when it's a proper noun, which are the names of places or things. Similar reasoning should be applied to any other words you're thinking of capitalizing, like telephone or trainer. Or professor. Or legendary, seriously stop that.

Dialogue is written as "Hello," she said or "Hello!" she said, never "Hello." She said or "Hello." she said or "Hello," She said or "Hello" she said. The only exception to this is if the next sentence doesn't contain a speech verb, which is a verb describing how the dialogue is said. In that case it's written as "Hello." She grinned, never "Hello," she grinned or "Hello," She grinned or "Hello." she grinned. Note that something isn't a speech verb just because it's a sound you make with your mouth, so generally stuff like laughed or giggled is in the second category. Furthermore, if you're breaking up two complete sentences it's "Hi," she said. "This is it." not "Hi," she said, "this is it." or "Hi," she said "this is it." And if you're breaking up a sentence in the middle, it's "Hi. This," she said, "is it." The same punctuation and capitalization rules apply to thoughts, except you don't use quotation marks with thoughts.

Don't ask for OCs. You're entirely capable of doing it yourself and that way produces characters that actually fit the story as opposed to being a terrible mess.

It's not a bad Prologue, though I wish there was just a bit more. Grammar and spelling were good and the plot line seems to be moving in a good direction. In going to try and send in an oc but I have to ask you a few questions first.

This looks AWESOME! So well written. :)

Wow, It sounds really interesting. I'm going to send an OC ASAP

I'm interested, but I have a quick comment for you. Venusaur isn't a legendary, it's a starter. The legendaries of Kanto are Mew, Mewtwo, Moltres, Articuno, and Zapdos.

I might send in an OC of my own. I like your concept, it looks interesting.