Okay. This chapter just made me hate their dad even more. He’s such a mother forking butthole! UUUUGGH Make me want to punch him in the face every time he speaks or rather lectures Elsa. And where is their spineless mother?! I swear I hate just for not doing anything at all to defend her daughters. She just follows along like a brainless twat. Those parents really grind my gears...I can only take so much of this. Most chapters seems to be like this...Elsa shuts Anna out for a bit. Ignores her. Then on impulse Elsa breaks and speaks to Anna again in some manner. Some parents find out. Adgar’s mad. Adgar sends Anna to her room/away. He lectures Elsa and blames her for something. Elsa talks back. Her dads a complete self righteous, sanctimonious jerk. Elsa ends back at her room. It’s a depressing cycle. Gotta do it one chapter at a time.

May sound dark and I know it would be like big OC for Elsa, but I wish she would just freeze her parents...I hate them. Loved these last two chapters and that there was some sister fluff. Once it ends it’s always so heartbreaking...sigh

Love this chapter. It’s heartbreakingly beautiful. Poor Elsa I just feel for her. Anna’s fiery reaction is essentially how I feel about all this. Their parents are just horrendous. Especially the dad. The Idun lacks a backbone I feel.

Thank you very much for your story, it was truly awesome! You added so many things that were sooo interesting and it was still in line with the original story, you did a great job! Your descriptions of the events, of the characters’ feelings and of Elsa and Anna’s relationship were perfect! I really enjoyed reading it and it is definitively one of my favorite fanfictions, you can be proud of yourself

Thank you again for your awesome work, you’ve made my week
I’m looking forward to reading another of your stories,
See ya!

Spirit Of Dark Wolf / Lara

The first 26 chapters were good, but the ending was much better once the parents were out of the way.

Throughout the story you painted an accurate picture of what someone in Elsa's situation would probably feel. That was one hell of an emotional rollercoaster.

It was a bit surprising that you kept with the Disney-ending of no real consequences. I suppose that it fits as this is mostly just a retelling of the first Frozen movie, but given how much more realistic you made the emotions of the characters it would not have been inappropriate to deal a bit more harshly with characters who attempted regicide.

I didn't understand the stuttering Elsa over the last several chapters. It was like the first 30 chapters of Elsa, who was excellent with words, never happened. It would have been understandable for her to do so in front of a crowd or strangers, but she was even doing it with Anna and Gerda. It was just a character contradiction.

Anyways, this review is obviously several years too late, but I wanted to congratulate you on a compelling and detailed story.

I know this story is quite old, but I just found it. The first 26 chapters have been solid, and I am looking forward to finishing the rest of it.

The way you portray Elsa is very believable. She was locked up all of those years, clearly blaming herself for what happened to Anna, and so it makes sense that she would have a sense of self loathing. The story does a good job of making the reader feel for her. This has been the most rewarding part of the story so far.

Character bashing is never ok. Admittedly, if I were ever to bash some characters in fiction it would be these two considering the awful choices that they made, but it still detracts from the story overall. As real as Elsa's emotions are it becomes almost impossible to take them seriously when characters around her, contributing to those emotions, are bastardized in such a way. Characters can be bad, misguided, or outright evil without making them look moronic.

To some small degree Agdar's actions are understandable. He has a magical child who can barely control her powers and once even seriously injured her sister. So, from that stance it makes sense that he would develop a distrust of her over the years. This story just takes it to the extreme. For instance, Agdar doesn't believe Elsa's tornado warning (even after she accurately predicted the blizzard), and he didn't even apologize to her after locking her up with the anti-magic chains. The tornado may not have hit the castle, but the weather system did so clearly Elsa wasn't responsible for it. Despite this unbelievable level of distrust he still leaves Elsa as his heir apparent too. This and numerous other actions within the story were either completely contradictory or outright silly. I mean...in this story he once credited Elsa for her astute observation of a potential trade deal when she was just 3 years old and yet he blames and locks Elsa in a dungeon when her sister hugs her (shouldn't it be pretty obvious from a few feet away that only one of the people was actually doing the hugging?). Apologies for the critique. Elsa's state of mind is a highlight of the story, but the painting characters around her as completely inept also diminished some of that impact.

Poor Elsa! I so wish Anna knew about her powers sooner and her parents didn't encourage Elsa to hide her feelings and powers. That was a dumb move on their part! Anyway I love the story :D

This has been one of the best stories i have ever read. Thankyou.

The only thing I can't get around is Elsa going out to a creek in the forest. In aerial shots like the last one in Frozen, the castle is clearly separated from the town by a small inlet, surrounded by water on all sides, and the only way to get to it is via a stone bridge (there's a theory that Arendelle's capital was either moved here after the last capital burned to the ground or it suffered a devastating fire maybe 100 years ago and what we have now is what has been built up). But I'll accept that this little cropping of trees exists for story purposes.

This whole argument in the cellar came off like "Life's Too Short" from the cut songs.

This whole "passing notes" thing lines up perfectly with what Olaf's Frozen Adventure has established (and Anna sliding drawings of Olaf under Elsa's door at Christmas).

Kinda surprised that Elsa isn't considering talking to Sir Jorgen Bjorgen to cope, nor is Anna sliding old drawings of Olaf under Elsa's door, but since this story was written before Olaf's Frozen Adventure ever came out (and Jennifer Lee has said that that story is non-canonical to the point that not only will its events be incorporated into the sequel film, but she hasn't even seen it), I suppose they'll just be considered offscreen things.

Aww Gerda is so good for Elsa.

Great start :)

Perfecto