Lovely story. I'm surprised you don't know how to use TOO correctly, though.

This is my favorite damn it's good! Thank you! Thank you!

I can never watch those shows. That type of religion annoys me no end where they shape the Bible to fit what they want to achieve. LOL! Though I'm sure every religion does it somewhat...

So glad Bella escaped. And found such a wonderful Edward...

I love this. I go back and read it again when I need some poetry and beauty in my life. So lush and descriptive. Also brings back fond childhood memories of our little property. If you sit very still in the woods these gorgeous dragonflies would land on my hand. I kinda miss that place.

¡excelente!

Wonderful story loved it!

Fabulous story! Loved it! :o)~

Gorgeously written. What an unexpected delight-you took the general theme of an age gap and made it into a captivating, graceful story.

Well. Done.

Loved this!

I'm glad she found him!

Great entry!

W-w-w-wow!

So totally unexpected but I loved it!

This was beautifully written and moved me cry at the end! Fantastic! Congratulations on 1st place!

Oh I liked the themes and characters so very much. I especially liked how vividly you portrayed the lush colors of their homes and their paintings. The first paragraph was a bit of garble and I felt like the story deserved a better first hook. Also there was so much text of explanation, it seemed as if the reader was underestimated; the ideas were obvious and they didn't need to be hammered home. I would add more dialogue and your vivid descriptions instead. I also don't think Jasper's almost magical empathy was necessary or maybe it was one of those over-explaining things. It made it harder for the reader to suspend their disbelief. "Magical" empathy wasn't needed - he could have just been a really nice guy.

This was fab!