Can you please fix this chapter to make it readable?

I know it’s been while but please continue writing.
A badass Bella and NCIS what’s not to like?
From Lillip. Denmark.

Please write more.

A temp hiatus? NOOOOO!
Please update? Soon. It was getting interesting, not that it already wasn’t. But there was so much more there to be written with so many more roads to take... and and and... OMG please update. I’ve got this story and your author profile on update/favorite list just to know when or if something is updated or happens. And well. -tears up- it’s been forever!
I’ll find a way to get you your favorite ice cream, or cram writing food, or or or or... OH gods I just got to bribery to get someone to update.
But that should make you feel good right? I mean this has been a good story thus far.
And I think you should be proud of that. And update! Who agrees!?
-asks the crazy fan girl blind/seeing impaired/legally blind and crazy in a good way chicha-
Just saying.
Fan girl. Editor of code, websites, and either FanFiction, or author publishing, translator for books that have been published that need some more editing. Runs several of my own websites. Teaches those who are site impaired how to use assistive tech and learn computers. I build computers and laptops to where they’d be super computers. Caffeine Addict. Anime/comic/mystery/military/list goes ow for shows that are awesome fan girl. All around fun person that has just a light that others want to be around(or so I’ve been told.. Blind, but has a light around me, countatious laughter, smile and will do anything in my power to help those that want to be helped. I’m the blind light bulb and energizer bunny that just make people keep going. Doesn’t mean I can’t cause a little chaos go though).
What I’m saying is don’t let anything stop you from your passion.
So many people have told me that because of my sight or lack there of legal disability- they’ve told me that I wouldn’t be able to do this or that. Well. Don’t listen. Don’t listen to them or the voice in your head to quit or put something on hiatus. If your stuck, jump over the obstacle and find a way through it. I think some people either say if you fall get back up. If you fall of your bike and are scared to get back on do it anyway. If your thrown from a horse (which for the record sucks) get back on, just not on the same horse cause not all horses match your personality (also true). If fighting through cancer and the doctors say well it’d be better off to just live the rest of your life and don’t fight and give up. I’m sorry. Wouldn’t you want to live with as much time as you have and fight for it. (Also true for me at least). I don’t mean to go on. I just hate to see people give up. Or go on hiatuses.
That And I have the inability to STFU. Sometimes It’s like Cassie, do shut up, or (one of my other blind friends) will say I will wack you in your need to make you sulk, and STFU. All out of love. Hey I’m a yankee, I either can’t shut up, or I every other word is some sort of “word” that goes into a sentence with regular words, with another “word” in between. Runs in the family. And I do believe that it’s how It just was from me being on the Rez in Canada, then Back in Massachusetts, then in Connecticut. Where I live now, totally different part of the country. They are all like, WTF is your issue. Me, can see you, don’t care, but if you try to hit me with you car, you and you car will have an issue with me.
Then again my blind/white cane is the best way to pick up guys.
I could send you that, being a blind cane for your height, or best fit for your height, so you can either pick up guys, dump them, or protect yourself from the worst kind of scum on this planet. Can help with that too.
I’m really sorry about me rambling. Talking too damn much.
But i would ramble or not be able to stuf if I didn’t believe in you or the story I am reviewing. Let alone give out examples about me and my life. You know? Cause I know you most Kilroy do want to hear it. Rather read it.
Just...please don’t let yourself stop yourself from something you like doing. If the hiatus is due to the thing that you are following your dream or passion for life. Then cool. But maybe put a chapter up every once in a while, because even I, me who has lack of one eye, and no corrective sight in the other, can tell that one of your passions is to write.
Just don’t let anything stop you. Not even yourself. Cause sometimes that’s the worst kind of obstacle.

Please continue this. I think it could go far.

3 I love it!

Writer again please. I love this fanfic.

Please write more...

Writer again, please! I Love this story!

PLS PLS PLS PLS UPDATE THIS IS AWESOME!

I love it but sadly today will be a shitty day

Bossy little thing isn't she. It wont be a surprise to Tony that she's Gibbs's kid. I hope that she and Jasper will end up as a couple. Who knows. Till next time.

love it please update

Haha i liked it. so Alice and Edward is to blame, huh? Well some change is always nice and please tell me that she wont forgive him like ever. That would make me very happy *devilish grin*
Please dont have her go Daddy at Gibbs the seccond she finds out, because even if he is her BIOLOGICAL father Charlie is and always will be her actual father, he was the one who was there for her and stuff. Every other story like this Bella immediately is like Daddy, Daddy I love you, and im like UGH!
Do I sence a Bella Jasper romance? If so i dont mind either way but i feel like she is going to stay away from boys a little first.
This is all suggestions, you can of course write whatever you want.
I really liked it :P

I always thought that Bella and Jasper would get along well. They just didn't get the opportunity to talk. The Pixie has alot of explaining to do. So will Eddie(Ha Ha Ha). Am I the only one that thinks Bella is a Gibblet? The way your going so far Bella just might end up with next time.