You have good imagery here, I can really picture what's going on. Barty and Morfin are both suitably creepy, and poor Cedric is just trying to keep it together enough to escape... even though we know there will be no escape. (Mwa ha ha!)

One small grammar thing: "it's" is a contraction of "it is". The possessive pronoun "its" has no apostrophe. Other than that, your spelling and grammar were good.

Your description in this was magnificent and very vivid, which I liked. As I was reading I could very much picture exactly what was happening to Cedric, and feel is fear as well. The little details of Morfin and Barty as well were very effective and intriguing to read about. Quite and interesting third character choice, but I really liked the way you worked Cedric in and where you went with this story. Very nice writing and quite an enjoyable read. Well done!

Hey

This is a really macabre and horrific one-shot. Me likey. What makes this great is that there is a strong sense of vagueness running through the entirety of the story - we can only assume where this is taking place or why it is occurring, or of course, what this ending truly symbolises (I do hope that it isn't what I think it is because that would be a bit much, even for me)

I really enjoyed this story and really hope to read more from you soon.