A pretty good display if you ask me. I can never decide which of them would wear the pants. Pyrrha does seem like a bit of a follower: apologizing for everything, following people into caves when you know it's a bad idea, etc. On the other hand, taking people's comic books and being authoritative (but still kind and supportive) in training. Jaune varies from aggressively confident to bashful and awkward every other scene he's in. Still, this was a good one.

Oh yeah! Wheatees! The breakfast of champions! Lol I'm sorry but reading "because champions always come out on top" got that in my mind.

Anyway I think you've captured the dynamic very well. It's also always a plus reading from Pyrrha's POV & I like that we see her insecurities about not living up to her title for Jaune. Another thing I enjoyed was that Jaune wasn't avoiding her because he believed he let her down but also his own title (which really gets thrown under the covers when Jaune's insecurities are brought up in fanfics, I've noticed.)

Keep on keepin on.
-l3largus
p.s. Here's a muffin.

I think your story is written well and I think you also have a great understanding of Jaune and Pyrrha's relationship. Thanks for writing this story!

Really good for a first fanfiction! I hope to see more (or more stories if this one is just a one-shot)

really close accuracy of the whole Arkos dynamic my only complaint pyrrha felt a little to angsty