Woah that's a good start

OOOGGGAAAADDDD. KILL THE HORSES! KILL EM! Anyway, nice chapter! Well,
I'm gonna go snipe some other characters that I don't like...such as Golden Freddy.

Wait, you're gonna use THOSE to fight a war? RUBBISH! WHY AM I TALKING LIKE THE SNIPER NOW? PROBABLY BECAUSE I JUST STOLE HIS RIFLE. I DONT KNOW. BUT PONIES AGAINST GUYS WITH GUNS? ESPECIALLY ME WITH A SNIPER RIFLE?! Wow. THIS IS GONNA GO TO SUGARY SH*T QUICK. Not the writing, your writing is fine, I'm just talking about the chance of a bunch of Unicorns surviving THIS. SUGARY SH*T COMIN RIGHT UP!

Number one, DOCTOR WHOOVES?! REALLY?! IS THAT EVEN ORIGINAL?! BECAUSE I KNOW SOMEONE WHO TOLD ME THEY CAME UP WITH THAT EXACT NAME! Ugh...anyway, number two. THE PONIES ARE HERE! MINI-GUN!...meh. Rubbish. FLAME-THROWER...meh. Rubbish. SHOTGU...meh. Rubbish. SNIPER RIFLE! YES!
"Oy!"
"Whu...NO! Go away! THIS IS MY SNIPER RIFLE! DIE PONIES! DIE!"

So...the Ponies (WHICH I HATE SO MUCH) are gonna show up? So far, there's nothing wrong! The Engineer did something to the teleported, Scout is being angry, everything's fine! But PONIES...AH GAD.

Hey, somethings wrong with 3 if the paragraphs in chap 2, these were in most of the 3 paragraphs. some thing did not go right or somrthing else happened.

hey are you still doing this story because i feel like it needs to be finished since it is a good story

i'm looking for reviews and dubstep

nice job on fixing some stuff :)