ok, that 'Guard dog' is definetly Hibari XD

XD The whole emu thing is still funny XDDD
And why didnt tsuna used his voice on the dogs?

what would happen if tsuna meets Bel?

This was absolutely hilarious and I’m so glad I found this when perusing the khr fics on here.
You write wonderfully and really bring the characters to life in a most amazing way.
Now, I’m going to check if you have any other stories and will proceed to add them to my reading list if you 1.) do have more and 2.) they are part of a fandom I belong to.

This chapter was rather funny, both due to what happened in it and the fact that I’m allergic to cucumbers, which I know is a rather strange allergy.
As to the note at the bottom, I’d already guessed Ciel Phantomhive for detective and cross dressing for plan C.
I just hadn’t thought to state it in a review in one of the previous chapters *laughs awkwardly*
This is a great read so far though, and I look forward to reading more.
I did have one thought though, since Belphegor is a prince and Tsuna is a prince... will Belphegor recognize Tsuna’s royal status and vice versa and address him by his title or?

Wait a second, what happen to I-pin and Fon?

I choked when I read “Ichigo Kurosaki” I did not expect bleach mentions

Enjoyed reading your story! Tsuna’s grandpa is so sneaky! I’m surprised that Tsuna’s mom isn’t mentioned at the coronation.

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Plan c for cross-dressing lol it would have been so adorable.

Bunkbeds. Or Hammocks. Being able to put some of the "beds" up off the floor with room underneath for a futon or another bed multiplies the amount of sleepers in a room with the exact same cubic footage. They're less storable than futons, maybe, though I expect some hammocks could be tucked away during the day if the anchors aren't too inconveniently placed. I know some meant for more casual use are designed to be easy enough to remove from their anchor-hangers, to keep them out of ill weather and such.

The backstory is good (you kept it as short as possible, which is a bonus for sure!), but it can use some tweaking (such as you mention a Gale Fox, which can, by assumption, control wind at most and just produce gales at least, though not sure whether it can control weather or not though). I assume that you mean to tell the readers that the spirit of the couple is a Gale Fox, but it isn't very clear. It seems as if the Gale Fox just popped out of nowhere. Also, if my assumptions are correct as stated above, I'm not sure whether Gale means that the spirit can control weather, but I'm no meteorologist and if the spirit from the couple and the Gale Fox are two different beings, then just ignore this.

Crossovers...that's a tough call, because if you're adding elements from their anime into your fanfiction, there will be people who have no idea what you're talking about. And if you explain, the people who know about these anime might not understand that it is for people who don't know and complain about it. Also, assuming that you will add elements from the other anime, it might put off some readers since they are expecting pure KHR as this fanfic is not categorized as a crossover. All in all, this is a delicate balance and ultimately your decision.

(This is before I noticed that the fanfic is complete, but I haven't read the entire story and I also want to tell you this.) I strongly suggest that if you're serious about the crossover part, you might want to make sure that the crossovered characters have important roles throughout the story rather than just cameo appearances.

The names are fine (I seriously love them!), and the name change is fine too (though I wonder if Reborm recognized Nana...).

And finally, one Very Important nitpicking detail. Latitude means North and South, while longitude is East and West. So 140 North and 0 latitude means 140 Nprth and 0 North/South, which Doesn't Exist. By your following description ('in the equator and south of Japan'), you mean 140 EAST and 0 latitude. I suggest that you either change or delete the coordinates because the following description has the generally-similar meaning. I also checked the reviews and the second chapter, and found no mention of this, which is why I'm adding this in my review.

Well, other than that, the rest of the story is good.

Damn.

It's a good story but it was so underwhelming...

I can't reading this was a waste of time tho.

Thank you for writing the story Author-san!

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These random crossover characters are seriously making me hesitate whether or not to read anymore. If you can't seriously write a story without forcing unnecessary characters into the story I have to wonder how worthwhile the read will be. It suggests lazy writing in that you didn't want to bother with the chore of creating your own OCs :/

Not to mention the plot is a little meh. Mafia is one of the most interesting aspects of any KHR fanfic, what you're proposing is the abandonment of that in your story and rebranding the millennia-old familia into a boring Vigilante Group. Let me guess, The Vigilantes save people while always trying to do the right thing and being the best of friends?... We already saw that in canon...