I loved this so much

You can't get married at 14 unless you're in some 3rd world country. Where they marry kids off to older men. Most countries marriage age is 18 and some places they can also marry at 16 if they have parents permission. The marrauge thing is really unrealistic and the fact she can't even remember it makes no sense. I'd think about rewriting that bit if I was you it's just a huge plot hole.

Why can't she take Sophie to meet Riley it's not that hard godness me.

Ooo so she didn't actually change her name. Lovely. And they're not married.

Bombshell is one word not two.

"were to youngWe're too young.

"you used me because you knew that reminding me of the good times would make me fall back in love with you" sorry but how did he use her? Explain it too me. Normally if you use someone it's so you can something you want but what did Carter even get out of it? Using her would be like him pretending to like her so he could steal her money or something. But he does actually like her and making her fall in love with him too is not using her.

Learn the different between you're and your you mix them up a lot. As well as their, there and they're.

You can't just make people a babies godfather or godmother. They can only be a godparent if the child has been christened and Sophie hasn't so Dan isn't her godfather.

"Us being married means you drop archibals and pick up Baizen." It doesn't work like that. When you get married you don't automatically have your name changed. If you want that you have to do some paperwork and show some certifcates before you can change your name. How else do you think that people end up keeping their name or having a double borrowed name? Or what about same sex couples if you automatically changed your name to your husbands name than how would that work for same sex couples. Deary me.

What's with you writing about Sophie? Like you hardly mention her and if you so it's mainly about Layla leaving her woth the nanny. You've never once described what she looks like. Like what hair colour does she have? Eye colour? As when you do mention her you never say what's she's doing it's always what other people are doing woth her like holding her. You never see simple stuff like Layla feeding her or stopping her cry. The way you write her you'd think she was a toy baby instead of a real one. You've never once described her move. The most interesting thing you've wrote about her is her giggling and that was once. I also don't get why Layla always leaves her as well when she can take her with her. Ever heard of a pram? Apparently not.

And then Chuck never interacts with her. Like he never holds her or anything. Most he's ever done is kiss her head.

Will you maybe think about stopping putting your texts in capitals it's really annoying and you're just missing capital letters.

"just because I hate you doesn't mean I don't care about you" sorry to tell you this Layla but if you hated him you wouldn't care hahah.

Highschool? it's two words.

Woah woah married at 14? Yeah... Sorry but in New York if you wanna be married at 14 you need your parents permission and permission from a judge and that definitely didn't happen with those two. It may be different if they got married in another state. Like some places they couldn't have got married at all. But the marrying age in America without parental consent is 18. Did you not research this when writing? Clearly not because you've just made yourself a plot hole. Unless Layla is really stupid and Carter is lying about it.

Downstairs is one word not two. The same with goodbye. I was going to say totally forgot to ask but have you ever thought of using line breaks? Because a lot of the time you suddenly just change scenes with no warning and t's hard to tell.

"until I give you my are labels and labels rchibald- class" Firstly that sentence makes no sense go back and reread what you've written. Because that sentence is just a jumble of random words. Also I think you missed out Nate's label unless you meant to call him class?

What does Layla mean "maybe next year" you can't go to university twice unless you're going onto do a masters or PHD. And then you can't just randomly change to a new uni after a year. If you wanna change uni's you have to drop out of your current one and reapply to the one you want. To be honest Layla could have just waited a couple of years till Sophie was old enough to go to school or nursery so there was someone to look after her then apply.

"Don't worry about Sophie, we got her." It's either "We've got her" or "we have got her."

Sophie isn't a fan of the nanny? Then why doesn't she stop going out and look after her child. I'm sorry but you give stuff up when you're a mum. Yes she still needs to go out and enjoy life but she goes out every single night. Bit hypocritical of her not to like having a nanny but won't look after her own baby...

"Hey,guys." Nate said
Hey,this is my cousin Tripp" was something wrong with your keyboard when you wrote this because there's nk space between the whole of "hey,guys." like it's just one word then you leave a bit gap between guys and Nate and don't leave a full stop after said. And you do the same thing in the next bit of speech apart from the full stop. Actually to be honest you leave too big of gaps for most of this chapter. Maybe your keyboard was faulty but if not you only use the spacebar once after each word. Not twice or 3 times like it looks like you're doing. You're writing looks really weird being spaced too much apart and also spaced too closely.

"Yeah,well,you two missed a lot" you use too many commas.

"Look who I have?" that isn't a question it's a statement. Would have been a question if you'd wrote something like "Guess who I have?" that.

"Okay, we'll go but your bringing Sophie." You're.

And they've been together for a day and broke back up again and for the exact same reason. Why did she agree to get back with him when she still thought the same. The mind boogles.

Not sure you know, assuming you dont because Layla was drinking but you can't drink while breastfeeding which I am assuming Layla is since the baby is only 3 months.

Also you forget to use grammar sometimes like "you okay." Where's your question mark that was a question right?

Why is it that Layla is so 100% that she's not getting back with Chuck because he loves Blair but as soon as he says "why do you keep pushing me away" she just magically changes her minds and jumps straight back into it. It makes no sense. It looks like you've tried to come up with a reason for them to get back together but couldn't figure one out so just threw together a random conversation that makes no sense.

Also when she says "chucks as much as I love you" there really should be aat the end of that as it seems like Chuck is cutting off her speech. And well if he wasn't cutting her off you need to reword that sentence.

And then they just start kissing and decide to lead it into the next room for sex. Like are they forgetting their baby or do they just not care? Kinda disgusting really leaving your baby to have sex. Unless the nanny is there which you failed to mention.

"I guess, but you owe me" that's not really something a mum would say to their child. It's more of what friends say to each other. It's really weird having a parent say that

It's strange how there's a random time jump and suddenly she's 6 months. Not long ago think it was last chapter she was talking about finding out the sex and you can find that out at 4 months. Maybe you got your date mixed up

Hi I know that there is still a ton of chapters left to read.
I am just hoping that Layla and Carter end up together I think he got the short end of the stick in the show. He has done bad things in the past and some I know is unforgivable,but to me he is the one Layla needs to be with. Dan is to much like a brother for that to ever really work. Chunk is meant for Blair and he and Layla work better as best friends and Co parents. Riley just no friends only please. She deserves a love that is just focused on her and not Blair or Serena. Sorry had to vent that I don't even know if you read your reviews on this story anymore. On to the next chapter!

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