| Reviews for Magic Trio or Golden Trio? |
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Guest chapter 13 . 8/5/2018 BUT YOU HAVE 64 |
Guest chapter 13 . 12/4/2017 Please update soon! It’s been so long, and im dying for a new chapter! I really love this story, and would do anything for it to continue! |
Guest chapter 13 . 11/30/2017 Don't want to be rude but, sometimes it's a bit confusing when you do dialogue because the dialogue tags are referencing to a different character then the one speaking. I would like to suggest you make the dialogue it's own paragraph. Again, I don't want to be rude, I love this story. Keep up the good work! |
denvitadroppen chapter 13 . 3/7/2017 Haha awesome! Keep up the good work |
Guest chapter 13 . 5/9/2016 love the story so far! |
Sakura-Hime 12345 chapter 13 . 7/30/2015 PLZZZZZZ UPDATE! the story is Awesome (just like Gilbert...) |
Sakura-Hime 12345 chapter 10 . 7/30/2015 Mochi Trolls... lol! |
YJV chapter 13 . 5/13/2015 Love it! please update soon! I hope Norway isn't evil or anything |
Cecil Salvatore chapter 13 . 5/11/2015 Well, now, this is... New, I suppose, would be the best way of putting it. I hope you don't mind me giving constructive criticism, as I believe you would be able to improve from it. Firstly, I would suggest doing a thorough investigation on the main House your story will revolve around. In this case, it appears to be Ravenclaw, which goes to show how much more work you have to do in understanding this House. Ravenclaws are known to be the most accepting of Houses when it comes to queer or eccentric personalities, so there isn't a reason why Romania's housemates would feel negativity towards him for being different. In Ravenclaw, difference is actually encouraged, so I would say you need to revamp the nature of your depiction of the House to suit this. Moving on, I do believe you need to place a little more effort into explaining and describing the surroundings of the story. It may seem obvious to you what's happening, and which character is speaking, but, for the reader, it's a bit of puzzle to pick up. Your characters should have a bit more distinguishable traits for each of them, and try to explain the story in more detail. You appear to be rushing the story on without bothering to ensure that your readers have sufficient amount of information to continue reading with ease. Finally, try to make the story yours. If we are reading a crossover, it's rather obvious that we would know both universes of each fandom quite well. That being said, there isn't any joy or interest to be found while reading the same story, only with a different cast of characters; most of which resemble the original characters much too strongly. Also, if you are going to borrow ideas from other FanFictions, you should ask permission from the author who first used it and be sure to always credit them. They placed a lot of effort into coming up with their plot lines, so they deserve it. Plus, I would suggest for you to stop begging for reviews. Not many people appreciate having someone breathe down their neck to leave a comment on a story just to have it continue. |
little Miss punk rocker chapter 13 . 4/23/2015 FELIKS IS HERE! Finally! Sorry I didn't review, I was to busy reading this story! |
Quiet Leaf chapter 13 . 4/3/2015 *waits patiently for an update* LAAAAAAAA I have decided to bestow you with a Flying Mint Bunny! *gives you one* |
Quiet Leaf chapter 12 . 4/3/2015 Oh, LOL, just the idea of Russia sticking out the back of Estonia's head is bizarre. |
Quiet Leaf chapter 11 . 4/3/2015 Aw, Norge died. D: HOW COULD YOU? *sets you on fire* |
Quiet Leaf chapter 9 . 4/3/2015 *looks around for dark shadow* At the beginning, I felt sorry for Arthur, now it's VASILICA! |
Quiet Leaf chapter 6 . 4/3/2015 FLYING MINT BUNNY YAY! Flying Mint Bunny forever. :D |