I think this story is the best take on Cinder raising Ruby that I’ve come across, so it makes me sad to see that it’s probably not going to be continued.

Hope you continue

Damn good read. Perfect blend of darkness, fluff and drama. Really hoping you come back to it some day, cuz this idea is just to awesome to leave at the top of the first hill of the rollercoaster.

I would love to see an update or have a rewrite to deal with the new information. The bad guys have been fleshed out so a change in some motivations may be in order.

Well, now, this is interesting. First thing, I always appreciate a story that has people who feel like ipeople/i, rather than roles to fill on a casting sheet.

For all that Cinder seems to have thought Ruby set her plans back, she might actually have helped. With or without Cinder's influence, things were always going to boil over. The climate presented made it an inevitability. What Ruby did was idelay/i the White Fang's militarization. Effectively, that anger was only contained for a longer period, and that means a bigger explosion. Additionally, they now have the Iron Fur, a group that is legally able to train. When the White Fang does go radical, they'll have an actual militia.

Y'know, I normally hate it when a Ruby with a drastically different backstory ends up with a sniper-scythe named Crescent Rose. Here, though, it makes sense. Not only is Ruby on moderately friendly terms with Qrow (and thus can hear his tales), but it's not like Ruby jumped straight there. She experimented, found what weapons felt best for her, and refined those ideas. It flows so naturally. I also really like Somber Thorn; Crescent Rose isn't exactly the best for cramped quarters, CQC, or stealth. Also, like this Crescent Rose, Somber Thorn's creaton just feels so natural.

I worry that Ruby's going to be caught at a crossroads eventually. Specifically, between Yang, Cinder and Emerald, and Blake. Yang's fallen in with racists who are subtly trying to bring her around to their type of thinking. This isn't helped by her thinking Blake is stealing "her" sister. I know Yang admitted she's the one who gave sister privileges when she abandoned Ruby, but I'm not sure she just isn't hiding it better.

Blake is pretty in with the White Fang at the moment. Part of that seems to actually be because of Ruby; she's seen that humans and faunus can get along. Subsequently, she seems to be more willing to fight for what the White Fang believes in, even as their ideals and methods are perverted. She also seems to hate Yang for abandoning Ruby, and (correctly) mistrusts Cinder.

For this, I'm assuming that Emerald stays with Cinder regardless. Now, Cinder might as well be Ruby's mom in all but name and blood at this point, and Emerald a surrogate Yang. Cinder and Emerald clearly reciprocate, and Ruby and Emerald even made a pact to never leave the other. Cinder's clearly mellowed out slightly, too, since she seems to treat Emerald the same way. However, Cinder is still cruel and ruthless outside of that setting. She also still expects Ruby to help her, given their takedown of a fleeing Torchwick.

It's not as overt, but I think that Cinder hates Yang for the same reason Blake does. I think Cinder only tolerates Blake because of how much Ruby cares about her; Blake's nearly gotten Ruby killed three times already (though Cinder only knows of two). The first time was when she was almost choked to death by Adam (after both attending the rally at Blake's invitation and as a result of saving Blake). The second was when Blake asked Ruby to unlock her Aura. The third was by putting Ruby in the sights of anti-faunus groups when she suggested wearing the necklace. None of these were done with malice, but it's also true none of these would have happened without Blake's input.

Between the three, I don't think Yang has a chance; anything she tries will probably just push Ruby away. Blake and Cinder are trickier; Ruby shares a connection with the cat faunus in a way that most people will never experience. That will always count for something. On the other hand, Cinder gave Ruby everything, and Emerald is her sistsr through their shared trials. Either way, Ruby will feel like she's abandoning someone like Yang abandoned her.

Speaking of abandonment, I hope this fic isn't. I'd love to see more, though I'm also not holding my breath.

Plzzzzzzzz update this is really good and needs to be shared with the world

I know I'm two years late but this fanfic is one of the best that I have read; it's really well written out and has a compelling and interesting take on the show. Great work! :D

One nitpicky thing, for a speed semblance Ruby's speed is about half of what an olympic sprinter can average on a 100m dash. Granted she's like 8, but still.

Im loving it so far but i must admit i was caught off guard when ruby said "I want to be the only one inside of you" omg that was gold kudos for that

Awesome read so far hopefully you continue with this story.

Wonderful!

First, love the story. I feel it's probably the best written, "Ruby was abandoned somehow and taken in by Cinder" story I've read on the site.

Next, it's a huge pity this story is on indefinite hiatus.

Lastly, I would have thought that Cinder would be happy with the current events. After all, she's going to get her militarized version of the White Fang after all.

Oh shhhhhiiiiiiii-rrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr.

What have you gotten into this time,Crow.(the problem:WHY NOT CHECK HOUSES!)

If Ruby didn't move at all wouldn't that mean she wouldn't breath as well?