Ahhhh I really like your workkkk, it's so good! Sad that it's stopped though haha hope you can get some time to come give it some love! Nah I'm kidding, you're probably really busy

I really enjoyed the start and i look forward into seeing more.I really hope you finish your story unlike most of the writers, and also please make the chapters longer.

Enjoyable, but far too short. You should take some more time to write more into a chapter. You need not worry on getting another chapter out as soon as possible, rather, take the time to write a long, very good chapter. Remember, Quality always trumps haste. But hey, if you're not used to writing long chapters, no need. Simply write in your own comfort zone

Still, I enjoyed it and it did give some plot points. I should've realized that you'd be taking the Nocturne route xD Interesting, I'm eager to see where you take this.

Wings

This does have a lot of potential. Let's see how it turns out

Guess i'll go for the criticism as usual,since it is lacking in ,you'll have congrats from the others I guess.

For the intro,not bad,We can feel that Akali is affected by some event.

So let's get to the point :

-You make Zed appear like the "Dark-unwanted-badass-guy-who-will-be-noticed-by-the-sexy-girl",the idea itself ain't bad exept that it has 0 originalty,most of Zed fanfictions present him like that it's too cliche,you praise Shen by some exited girls to give some interest to Zed (Dunno why Shen get smashed in almost every Zed fanfiction,in many points)

-One of the girls,Miyukii I guess,says that "No way he would ever lose to someone like Zed" While the following lines tell that it's ANOTHER draw. Guess that's the kind of girls Shen attracs in your ones who will keep following a guy as a group while looking at him and laughing because he is so that each time you see girls like that you know that they must have a low QI.

-"I've seen you spare with your mom many times" (Nice you voyeur) Zed's face turned pink (Keep on,makes you just look like a perv) "I like makes me really happy!" (Akali,you have some mental deficit . Would explain your gameplay tho).*Facepalm*Seriously,is this scene even logic?

-Zed shows his forbidden art to Akali,who reacts like a mom with her child playing in mud,"that's bad".

-Memories come back,talking about people's reaction to Zed's banishment,and it's again the "Dark-unwanted-guy-with-the-sexy-girl" ,it was already unoriginal,repeating yourself will only make it worse.

I guess that's it,i'll appear merciless but it's because I hate to see 20 comments that can be summed up in "lol nice keep up 3"

Good luck for the rest

Please update soon! Im looking forward to reading this fic.

Good job, this is going to be interesting.

This first chapter was very well done. A bit short, but first chapters tend to be short I thoroughly enjoyed it and it accomplished what a first chapter is supposed to do; that is, Get the reader's (In this case, my) attention.

Looking forward to the next chapter.

Wings

I like this beggining, it's different fron the others zed x akali stories i have read, even if it wasn't so close to the lore is still a good plot. I really like this pairing so you will find me waiting for your next chapter.