idea is orginal but its quite rushed feels a bit like a hamster on coffee and the connection with the characters isnt really there because of it so im gonna stop reading here with the hope the next time i come across this story its more enjoyable (this isnt a flame just my honest opinion with hopes you'll spot what im trying to say and improve as this plot has a good vibe to it)

ha sad thing is while Jiraiya did help instill a sense of Honor an all that into Naruto he really didn't teach him anything other than that

why do so many fucking people make him do a rasengan with a clone? By the time he left his world he's fucking MASTERED it he ONLY uses a clone for the RASENSHURIKEN

Sorry, it started out decent enough, but then you started rushing everything and the flow of the story is all over the place.

why they had his ticket ?

I need mooooooooooooreeeeeeeee!

I'm so happy you updated:D I hope to see Naruto fight more though:) keep up the good work and please update soon:)

Interesting story, looking forward to the next chapter.

Most of this is simply canon.

Man this is getting good so I can't wait for the next chapter

Without naruto they would lose the war so if you ever have them show what happens to the elemental nations i hope thats whats happened it would make no sense for them to win

Great chapter cant wait fore more

good development

Ok. I only got to the part when naruto and b agreed and were ok with being sealed. Fuck that. I couldn't read any further. Naruto and b just agreeing and ok with beind sealed away? Hell no, naruto would try and find another way and would not just take that laying down!

Dude there are so many spelling mistakes...I know English might be your second or third language but get a beta or something.