I was taught, actually, *not* to write in a character's voice, to only do that for their dialogue. But I have come to appreciate when a tale from a character's perspective matches their external voice, because the external is often just an extension of how we think.

So let me go ahead and thank you for writing in the character of Kaylee *so damn well*!

I really enjoyed reading this.

Great story from Kaylee's point of view. I've rewatched this show a lot, but you highlighted a point of view I never considered! the crew sent away on the shuttles. Thank you for openimg my eyes.
Keep up the writing, preferably about Firefly.

Can you turn the font color to black?
I am unable to read pink. Strains my eyes.

It's almost scary how much this sounds like Kaylee. Great job!

I don't know why this story hasn't received more reviews because your dialect and characterization of Kaylee is spot on. The line where she's talking about the perfume, and she says: "Bet it smells real nice though. Like expensive flowers." was so spot on, you could literally *hear* Kaylee speak.

The look in on Mal from an outsider's POV is a nice change of pace, and it's especially nice coming from someone like Kaylee who's not interested in him in THAT way, but is just respectful and in awe of him.

I have read quite a few Firefly stories where characterization is like a shadow of what the characters are really like, and it is just a breath of fresh air to read something where the author knows what they're writing about. Thank you.

The General

shes a sweetie.

Elaborating on my previous review.

This ruled. I like how it meshed with Mal's coinciding story. The best part has to be the end, with him just coming and sitting. I can see that happening onscreen, and it's great.

You can really feel the characters. Kaylee's love for her ship and her view of the others; Mal's protectiveness of his crew, his need to get the job done, get paid, and keep flyin'.

Shiny.

Hey,

This was really well written... you had Kaylee's voice down perfect, and I loved her look at Mal post-Out of Gas. Thanks for the terrific story, it was a great epilogue for one of the best eps the show's had yet. Look forward to reading more from you.

Nice story - you've gor Kaylee's voice very well, and some good insight into both her character and Mal's.

wow thats some awful good writing. you totally have her character down and the writing seemed like dialogue straight outta the Kaylees mouth

Amazing! Great job.

Very nice! Very in-character, it really sounded like Kaylee, and I could just see Mal haunting the ship, still affected by nearly dying alone, but unwilling to talk about it.

I did wonder why (on my screen at least) your text came up in a really hard-to-read peach, though :) If that was on purpose, can I beg you to stick to black? My eyes get tired easily ::grin:: and I'd like to read more of your work.

Another great look at the crew of Serenity. I loved the idea of Mal coming down to the engine room when he couldn't sleep, and Kaylee's sympathy for the captain. Details are what make a story special, and you had some lovely ones: Kaylee wondering what the perfume smelled like, and cleaning up the fingerprints, and River's outburst.

One question I have though: this and your last story, "a butterfly pinned", were inspired by a selection of words, and I was wondering where they came from.

Very nice. I always doo like to take in depth looks at what's going on in their heads. Hope you write more soon!