Your mother, was a daughter of Hades, and your grandfather, on your mother's side, was a son Zeus."
This makes no sense if Percy’s maternal grandfather was a son of Zeus and his daughter was a daughter of hades did he have a child with hades. To be honest is it even possibly for a son of Zeus to be within a mile radius of hades?

please update soon, btw some possible pairings for percy, just thought i'd leave some here. nyx, thalassa, ananke, gaia or gaea, hemera, amphitrite, hera, persephone, leto, artemis, hestia, aphrodite, nike, eris, iris, younger looking fates, chaos (female), medusa, empousa, reyna, hylla, circe, hecate, styx, demeter, kinzie, athena, zoe, bianca, thalia, khione, rhode, kymopoleia, katie, silena, (other goddesses from other pantheons), other titanesses, again not telling you you have to do all of them, but it would be nice to see some of them at least, and great story.

Am I the only one who smells a rebellion? :P

Can I make a suggestion? How about you re write the story with more character and plot development. This will allow you to fix any mistakes you once made. Also find beta. Your beta should fix any grammar mistakes, and also tell you what to improve upon in the story. So, for example I would recommend that you split up the first chapter and do in depth individual chapters, on Percy's time with Moros, how Ares chased him and all this. Now, do remember that this is just a suggestion and you don't have to do it, as this story is quite good anyway.

Honestly you had a good plot. I think that your ideas were very good, but not flushed out to their fullest. This has all of the makings of an epic length story.

I think that if you want to do it justice a rewrite would not be bad, but leave what you have up here. I think if you just want to leave this story tie it up with an epilogue. You did not talk about what happened to all of the demigods. I think that you have an ability to come up with good plot ideas.

I think that as a writer you should enjoy writing stories for yourself. I think you have fallen into the habit that you didn't really like your own story all that much. This last chapter showed this. It was a bit rushed.

I would say that I hope you continue to write. You have a good grasp on how to weave a story already. That is more important than you might think. The reason you most likely had so many follows is because of this alone.

Have a nice day,
foxy

Interesting plot twist.

It's a good story and I want to see more. I don't normally review often.

Sequel

Please update soon this story is really really good xx

review mobile typing is horrrid still but better on tablets.

Reviewed!

I really HATE HATE HATE Percabeth. So many people blindly follow it cause it's what Riordan laid out in the books. I don't. I never will. I dunno what pairing I like, but it's just not Percabeth.

So, are you going to make any other "ziplock bags of energy"? I hope so. They seem fun?

33rd review! You have to update now! I will review the rest of your chapters, but my phone is dying so it'll have to wait. So, I'm guessing that Pire and his fellow artifacts will play a large part in the war. Where is Nemesis? And a suggestion... if you come up with a new part of the plot, maybe you could edit the previous chapters to drop little hints of the future. That'll keep it from being annoying when the plot randomly shifts in a certain direction. The reader can look back and see where it was hinted at, instead of thinking, "Wait, what? Where did this even come from?" Ok, that's all I got. Keep being awesome!

(Chapter 12) Okay. That was a pretty random adventure. Although the idea of the candle wax was cool. I would have never thought of that. But seriously... there are like, days until the final battle! And Percy has to do this? Or is this Nemesis's twisted version of training?

(Chapters 9 and 10) So... Percy has no abilities? Good. Having to train hard keeps him from seeming overpowered. As for Orion... I TOLD YOU SO! Doing stuff to supporting characters makes the main character mad, unleashing his powers! I'm still wondering about the campers' reactions to this. And also, where's Annabeth?

(Chapters 7 and 8) I felt like chapter 7 was filler. Although I like the part about the fish calling Orion Master. I'm still curious about Annabeth. In chapter 8, does Percy know all about the prophecy because of Moros's blessing? And are people going to treat him weirdly because they know he's immortal?