Excellent.v

Very well written. Poor Susannah.

Nice. I have been thinking of a story continuing sussanahs life. This is beautiful and re edundant just as the tower itself. The only thing it needs is the rest or their re-awakenings. Id love 2hear Oy re-awaken. Wonderful concept.

yay! Written jus' like the Dark Tower. And as uplifting and depressing. Imma only upto book four, so I cannot say anything about incongruities except that they make me curious. It is dipping into a horrible but very possible alternate ending. Good quote drops also. Hurray.

Love the ideas!

First, sorry for my english i'm french.
Your story is not happy and i really liked the fatalist in the subtext.
However, i like to see the ka-tet together in the cycle, it confirmed Cor's theory on what's happen when all member of kat-tet die.
I don't understand how Eddie Toren become the "true" Eddie, i think they are two different people, just like Eddie and Cuthbert are similar.
And i like the conclusion of the chapter just like the end of Dark Tower;
Finally, this story will become an alternative ending at the saga or just a one-shot ?

One problem... Eddie wasn't there to meet Dandelo... Susannah even thinks to herself that Eddie would have noticed Odd's lane and realized it meant Dandelo